We are the unhealed scars
on society's sphyllic face
Dispensing verbal acid
corroding the senses
searing the consciousness
and immortalising creativity
in verses of insipiration
Author notes
Samuel Chuma
Harare
Zimbabwe
A contest entry
- Add a verse. for Tapestry of poets world record attempt by Janice M Pickett.
360 points, ended August 17, 2007, 144 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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That's a good noise I made up there LoL, I enjoyed this piece very much, I loved the conciseness of the poem, I am completely unaware of what you were meaning or trying to spell with "sphyllic". I tried to find it in the dictionary or maybe you were thinking of "syphilitic" which is an adjective and would be used the same way you used "sphyllic face". It means pertaining to, noting, or affected with syphilis. I'm pretty sure that's what you were going for, but of course I could be completely wrong. Either way I like the poem whether it has spelling mistakes or not, those are things easily fixed and are not even relevant to the subject matter. So it doesn't take anything away from the poem. But that's only b/c I'm confident that that's what you were trying to express or get across, and it worked great. Congrats on a poem well written. It was a good read, hopefully you'll take the time to read something of mine someday. Always good to hear from diffrent people with different tastes. Well thank you for sharing this with everybody. Hopefully I'll talk to you again...
TTYL
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we are
yes! stick - it - to - the - man!
this is a timeless piece that describes our generation so very well. i do believe we are "unhealed scars." the divorce rate in America is through the roof, and has become almost the norm. i don't know about where you are from, but it seems as though society sense of morality is decaying by the day. and we are the products of this!
i couldn't find the definition of "sphillic" but that doesn't quite matter. i can understand it for what it is. your diction is very well chosen.
i just wish more of us wrote "verses of inspiration" like you.
your fellow poet,
Pap
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that was great!
but hey sammy, you said i was verbal acid. well gosh. so just how am i suppose to take all this? love your nemisis
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Hey! Nice One
Different but liked it nevertheless!
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Glad you did well!
Mine was DQ'd
Tang
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Thanks Samuel
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