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A Bitter-Sweet Poison

Why do we love this venom?
Its bitter-sweet simplicity
The ever taunting phantom
Many are too hasty

Once we taste it
We can not stop
But we don't give it credit
It makes our hearts beat nonstop

This draft of death
Can give us life,
Take away our breath
Or stab us with a knife

Some live for it
Some die for it
Some misunderstand it
Some abuse it

But one thing remains the same:
No matter what it has done before
Deep down we all want its flame
Though many are unsure

Because most know its harsh sting
But they hold to a hope
Of what they've seen:
Couples balancing on the tightrope

So many watch
To see if they will fall
As fate plays hopscotch
With their downfall

And should they come tumbling down
Two more brave souls will take their spots
Though they too could soon be face down
Face down with ominous thoughts

So remember to all
This poison is not to be taken lightly
Nor is it to be thought small
But to be taken cautiously

With deep thought and care
For the scars are hard to erase
And success is rare
But nothing can replace

The bitter-sweet tinge
Of love and loss
Though some may twinge
At the strange chaos

There is non better than
A bitter-sweet poison,
Love with out plan,
And a smile past its season

Author notes

For Contest: R o s e B l o s s o m 1 0 0 "Don't die live life"

For those that did not pick up on the implications this poem is about love.

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I am pretty. I chose to right about love, plus it could imply heart break. My screen name: RoseBlossom100

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  • evil-incarnate
    August 19

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    But they hold to a hope of what they've seen:
    Couples balancing on the tightrope.
    i love that line. i love the whole poison thing too...poison always has a place with me, always has meaning, and i love how youve captured that here. thanks


  • Danna Hobart
    May 11
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    Thank you for entering.


  • Antebellum
    May 6
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    this is a sad write...but a really good write.
    awesome job.


  • GypsyEyes
    January 12, 2008

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    bitter sweet like you said. it was sad but i loved it because it was sad! great emotion! thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
    ~NineTailedFox

  • angelofdarkness1901
    October 6, 2007

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    ever taunting phantom. Wow i wish i wrote that. The way u wrote this is just like wow! You know what i mean. It's hard to describe it, it's like it captured me.


  • edit my world.
    August 19, 2007

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    aww this is so sad....but its still a beautiful write. some people take love for granted for what ever reason and i totally am guilty of that...and it pains me that he doesnt know...ahem...anyway lol i got offf topic! This great..raw talent here..usually when people think of love they go into mushy gushy bull shit. lol and only one person is allowed to that way with me. Nice take on love and heart break!
    Thanks for entering!


  • loveaswellashate
    August 18, 2007

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    This is a really good poem.. i relly like it.. sorry its taking so long.. lots of stuff goin on as the break is comeing to an end.. lol.. thanks for joining and good luck in the contest..
    Laters
    Loves...*hugs*


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    August 12, 2007
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    wow! really good! I enjoyed reading this piece! I also really liked the background you chose too! My favorite types of poems are ones about love! Great job! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!


    -Steve-


  • RuLives4GodOnly
    August 8, 2007
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    Wow! Superbly written!
    And yes, love CAN be a
    poison SOMETIMES! It's
    hard to deal with but there
    is a love that will NEVER go
    away or leave you asstray.
    His name: Jesus Christ.
    He loves you no matter what!

    I loved this poem
    because it made me
    think about love's
    simplicity and yet
    complexity IN its
    being so simple...


  • HpWICKEDangel
    July 27, 2007
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    AMAZING!! you captured the way love seems to be to all. a poison that every one wants to have a taste of. Great piece here. thanks for sharing.


  • Malabu
    July 24, 2007

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    very nice poem

    I think it's a tad bit over twenty lines though...might want to trim it a bit....take a look at the rules...before judging...Ok?
    Mal


  • Temptation.
    July 23, 2007
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    OMG. IM SPEECHLESS. THIS IS.... IDK! I CANT THINK OF THE WORDS TO DESCRIBE IT!

    With deep thought and care
    For the scars are hard to erase
    And success is rare
    But nothing can replace

    THIS STANZA WAS MY FAVORITE THO. ITS DEEP. AND AMAZING!..

    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ENTERING AND GOOD LUCK!

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