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Morning Tears

I'll die in the morning
without you by my side
crying 'till the tears are gone
within your heart I lie

The past is behind us
look forward to the "now"
Wondering what could have been
than asking myself how?

I'll die in the morning
without you by my side
Crying 'till the tears are gone
Within my heart you'll always lie

"The one who got away"
is what you'll be called by name
But deep within my broken heart
My feelings are still the same

I'll die in the morning
without you by my side
Because these haunting memories
deep within my heart you'll always lie.

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This is an EXTEREMLY rough copy that needs ALOT of work done to it, but I decided to share it now to get opinions on it, and see what you all think needs to be done about it! Im all ears for critisem!

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  • Meaningless-Routine
    July 22, 2007

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    I Like it, It's simple, yet, it gets the point across.


    "The one who got away" is what you'll be called by name"

    I Love that. =)