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Bizarre Tales of the Beyond

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The moon twists in the sky,
trying to see
what all the fuss is about;
doesn't everyone have a dark side?

The stars aren't any help at all;
they grin too widely,
always mute ~ at least,
until they implode.

There's a lesson there,
I'm sure of it.

I don't trust anyone
that smiles all of the time ~
they're either delusional
or outright liars.

The moon glares at them balefully,
telling them
to get out of her space.

As usual,
they ignore her,

thinking,
"Moody bitch, ain't she?"

 

 

 

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  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 25

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    nice. i loved this piece! i enjoyed this alot! i loved the last four lines:


    As usual,
    they ignore her,

    thinking,
    "Moody bitch, ain't she?"

    That part made me laugh out loud so hard. keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • lunarlunacy
    February 7
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    LOL love the tongue in cheek ending


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 31, 2007

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    I found witty humor within these lines and your message is great. Reminds me of the "Don't trust a skinny cook" theory ha! Yeah...gotta worry about those folks that grin all the time ha! ~tia


  • Alexander Hine
    July 26, 2007

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    I don't mind people that smile all the time, as long as their at a safe distance from me. Very funny poem, I liked the twisting of the image to something comic. The stars grin too widely; this gave me wondrous images of bug eyed, over-excited stars - "any minute now, any minute now - SUPERNOVA!" Delightful, I tells ya.
    Well, another great write from you, well done.
    Smiling constantly like a psycho,
    K. F.

    P. S. I hate to plug, but I have recorded two of my poems as songs and put them on my myspace music. If you're interested - www.myspace.com/jojotaffaapossmusicaldeath


  • arafura gold member
    July 23, 2007
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    moody bitch...

    Worthy trophy winner poet! A bit different from your usual work... but very good!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 23, 2007
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    lol - i love that ending!


  • transcendental baby gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    It made me laugh I like the ol' bitchy moon


  • PageTurner
    July 23, 2007

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    A JOY!

    It made me laugh... you onery so 'n so!

    "thinking,
    "Moody bitch, ain't she?""

    She can be!

    Mornin' Mirth, Scribe... Thanks for the laff!
    ~ Nicholas ~




  • LadyUnique silver member
    July 23, 2007

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    very witty and oh so true

    'always mute ~ at least,
    until they implode.

    There's a lesson there,
    I'm sure of it.'

    it ain't good to hold it all in


  • Cat gold member
    July 23, 2007
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    lol... wonderful surprise ending!


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 23, 2007

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    LOL...this is so funny, Vlindertjie!! I'm sure Melissa is smiling...well, I am smiling on this Monday morning at work. Well done

    ~ Nicolette


  • Viyanna Rosemarie 2
    July 22, 2007

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    I don't trust anyone
    that smiles all of the time ~
    they're either delusional
    or outright liars.

    so very true. your words and picture choices never cease to amaze me. i wish you well in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie

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