[pitter.pitter.patter]
glass slippers && ruby red lips
like a bread trail to a bed
[pitter.pitter.patter]
racing heartbeats don't mean a thing
.he could have anyone doll.
you're nothing special in raggy old dresses
.but you shine like a * star * in white.
doesn't matter baby he can never change
but boy;oh;boy can he make your heart just go
[pitter.pitter.patter]
the second his Ch-ch-arming name is mentioned
your heart races to skip && skips to race
[guess you've neverever felt this way]
glasses for slippers and he'll come right to you
pumpkin carriages and some rats for your friends
he made a mis.take and you'll never hear from him again
mopping floors and cleaning the chimney
..cinderella.cinderella..
one night of make-up && grace will never change
.a maid in rags.
Author notes
fairytales rock!
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A contest entry
- Twisted Fairytales! Yay!!! Come in and see by LadyOfFate.
600 points, ended August 19, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [HappyEndingOrJustTheEnd] by whiterabbit..
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At first I had trouble linking the poem to the title and then the slipper part came and the old "Ah ha syndrome hit!!!!! I enjoyed reading this one!!!!!!!!! Good luck on the contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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speechless
This is my favorite....that you've ever done.
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Whoa, this was definetly a twisted version of the fairytale, it sounded like it was being told by a very satisfied stepsister laughing at cinderella's failure. Wonderful job!
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ooh I loooveed this. The descriptions are wonderful. Beautiful and sad. Great job, thanks for entering.
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very intersting never seen puctionation like that before or the whole pitter pitter patter. but yeah nice work a bit strange, but it works none the less. thanks for entering
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loveeeeed this.
.cinderella.cinderella..
one night of make-up && grace will never change
.a maid in rags.
^^That was my favorite part.
It made me smile. I'm like oh yeah, that's totally awesome. lol. =]] Awesome possum! -
i would say that you've got balls, lol, but yeaaaa thats just not it. lol, you're brave...i dont think i would attempt this because i'd blow so bad at it. lol. But i likeddd it, it was really good, especially for your first fairytale like write, you know? lol.
Ill stop rambeling now, gah, im such a dwebe. :]
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Amazing... purely amazing. There is no other word for it. Billiant maybe. I have no clue why i absolutely loved this like i did. Amazing.
Emily
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This reminds me of cinderella somehow. Not sure why but it does. Its great though. I liked it a lot.
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