I hear my heart pound,
I feel my lungs burn,
Your words resound,
But I dare not turn,
My mind is in a race,
I hear you call,
I speed up my pace,
Then I fall,
Your there by my side,
To pick me up,
I don't know why,
But I want to run,
The pain in my chest,
The burn on my soul,
I better run fast,
I better not fold,
I'm running away,
I don't know why,
I start to break,
I start to cry,
I slow my pace,
I fall to my knees
We're face to face,
Then my mind sees,
You hold me in your arms,
I breath you in,
My mind screams alarm,
My heart says "You win."
I feel no pain,
You hear me cry,
Its not the same,
Then I ask why,
You tell me you love me,
I look in your eyes,
And what do I see,
I'm watching you cry,
I love you so much ,
I hold you tight,
I don't want to give up,
I don't want us to fight,
I want to be strong,
I don't want to cry,
I know I was wrong,
Without you I'll die,
So stay by my side,
While I'm asleep,
Don't ask me why,
And my heart you will keep.
A contest entry
- L.O.V.E!!!! by Condemd RyeZing.
555 points, ended February 27, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
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Amazing! Beautiful. I love it. nice job. thanks for entering!
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Thanx
Thanx! this was one of my first poem I ever wrote....i wrote it in one of my classes when i was bored....and thinkin bout someone...
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amazing!
i loved this one as well! you are very good! keep it up!
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This is good, the comma's helped me know how to read it I don't think they distracted from it, it's only those who don't use them correctly that can't read with them in it (; well done.
-NP
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Hmm. This was a beautiful poem, but a lot of it was cliche. Don't get me wrong. I write cliche all the damn time. I'm not sure why, but all the commas destracted from the beauty of the poem. It was a beautiful poem, though.
Write on!
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