[Locked] inside w i t h o u t the comfort of an ♥angel.♥
c
a
t
c
h
i
n
g
my /tears/
in the |Bottom| of a jar
>>FULL.<<
and theres
no r.o.o.m. for the [[hope]]
s p i l l i n g from *my* fingertips.
as I type ^away^ my (..soul..)
your
scent
wrapped
around
your
clothes
the ones that /e/n/g/u/l/f my thoughts
listening to the
::last song::
I heard YOU -whisper-
while the
k.n.o.t.t.e.d words _reveal_ themselves
r/e\le/a\s/i\ng the secret you
< locked > within
and...
I can't seem to
;Help myself;
from w|o|n|d|e|r|i|n|g
where are you?
Comments
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damn I love you and this poem! Fuckin' A your great debs!
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:)
Well, thanks you for the comment. It's flattering in a way. The reason for the title is more of a 'inside thought' than anything, 1) It is a "lyric" from the song I was listening to. "Listening to the last song I heard you whisper" and 2) It reminds me of that person.
The characters, Well, I was just extremely bored. I was just being goofy in a sense and trying something I usually don't do. It was a freewrite...
Thank you for the comment.
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Why the title?
Um, I can't say I have ever seen a poem quite like this. The extra characters took away from the actual poem. It was interesting, no doubt. I had to go back and read it again. It is an unmistakably beautiful poem. I guess apart from the weird character inputs, the only two things I can see off about it is the line "the ones the engulf my thoughts", should the second 'the' be 'they' or 'that'? Also, the third to last line - I can kind of pull reasons for the various added characters throughout, but why the semi-colons?
All in all, it was a beautiful poem with just enough sadness to remind the reader of their own splintered heart.
Write on!
~*~SP~*~
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