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A Moment Gained



Bluebirds offer their songs of summer,
floating upon the warm breeze
which swirls my hair,
as I walk along the edge of the creek
watching the water trickle,
in absence of rain

Savoring every shiny pebble
glimmering from the sun,
as if they were golden stones of worth

The trees stir above my head,
swaying my mood
to mixed memories

Blue skies
secretly peek through the leaves,
giving a moment of
simple pleasure

Wooded trail of life;
each footstep taken
leads to another promise,

only this time...

the promise is to myself~




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  • Room without doors gold member
    August 15, 2007
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    Outstanding

    I liked the way you created a poem which shows the beauty of nature. The imagery is finely drawn and I liked the detail and the way you ended the poem in a slightly enigmatic way. I liked your choice of language and the over all flow of this poem. Brilliant to read.


  • Harrisham Minhas gold member
    July 29, 2007

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    This is a beautiful poem.
    Very beautifully flowing and creating vivid imagery.

    Harrisham Minhas

  • InBetweenThoughts
    July 25, 2007

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    So beautiful my love It gives one a great feeling and the images are so clearly penned. Very enjoyable read, have a beautiful day, Ken IBT xoxox


    • jasminerose
      July 26, 2007
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      Thank you

      Thank you Ken/IBT for the lovely comment on my poem!
      Glad to hear you enjoyed it so It was a beautiful day to take a walk through the woods!!
      Guess I was inspired!
      Have a beautiful day too
      Love Linda
      xoxo

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 22, 2007
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    a very serene and calming write. nicely done.


  • My Darkness
    July 22, 2007
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    another great write... very deep, and great use of imagery.. well done! good luck in the contest!

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