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…so he was saying that even if he rolled the Olds
he’d still be standing in the rain with no clothes
blood running down his inner thigh turning pink
turning pink in the puddle at his feet
that all happened the July he hitch-hiked
out to ohio with a nickel in his pocket wearing blue shades,
and an Army shirt. Nothing much happened,
and he didn’t get laid, but he made much of the fact
in later years. In between the forms of poetry, decanted
philosophies, the lamps in which the genie had fled,
he rolled pennies carefully reading of tears, of one sort
or another. flipped through picture books, naked girls,
poems that other people wrote, the same thing.
wound up here, standing in for God in the play
didn’t have to do a lot, roll aluminum sheets, part seas,
that sort of rot.
that empty sort of feeling you get when the car is trashed,
and you’re still alive, but tumbling like a bird with a broken wing.

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  • cvillelisa
    January 25, 2008
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  • mononoaware
    July 23, 2007
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    ...

    cause pictures speak lowder than werds.


  • Fall.Of.Rome
    July 23, 2007

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    Oh wow. This was absolutely incredible. I know Sartre, and this was just...wow. The closing two lines were my personal favourites, they just painted such a beautifully tragic image in my mind. Amazing work, keep it up


  • passionvine
    July 23, 2007

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    Impossibly brilliant

    Oh my oh my

    This gets bookmarked as a favorite

    Just the line break on naked girls

    And poetry

    Alone is sheer gold

    There is a slow motion vision

    That takes the acceleration of life

    Of the craft

    And breaks it down into

    Experiential images

    And durable moments

    That are fleeting and granite all at once

    Who hasn’t been on this road afore?

    I think godot needs a beating, but we’ll start with his obnoxious boy messenger.

    Peace.


  • cvillelisa
    July 23, 2007

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    oh yay!



    i want them all together. congrats on gold cyber shiny.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    July 22, 2007

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    put the pedal to the metal and push some tin.. ...

    God and cars... now there's a combination, it's nearly 3am here and my brain is going like a fast car and body clock is all out of flunter with night shift mode.. so i sit here for a short while, with hot milk and good intentions to sleep soon

    good job Mistah... glad you got the the gold


  • cvillelisa
    July 22, 2007
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    really excellent.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 22, 2007
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    excellent.


  • cvillelisa
    July 22, 2007
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    this is great.

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