We each have a beast
Too many, to kill.
The pain I feel
From the beast I have
In my soul.
The pain is black.
The pain is blank.
The pain fills your heart
with your soul so blank.
How to kill
Before they kill me.
I can't feel-
I can't bleed.
The Beast in my soul
Is the same in yours
The same beast that kills,
So many...
How do I know?
When the beast stares at me.
For it is You,
So Pale and Blank.
No one can kill the beast,
For when you look in the mirror
it stares right back.
The pain in your heart;
Diminishes?
Author notes
I am a young writer by the way i write you can probably tell. Please give some feedback, it will help with my writing abilities.
A contest entry
- You kno you wanna! by lexie like woah featuring icantcmylifefrmhere by lexie like woah.
588 points, ended August 2, 2007, 30 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a great poem, but I think that if you want to draw the readers in you should switch up some of the filler words for more descriptive words... Keep up the excellent job in writing!
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It is a good poem, but it doesn't draw much detail, yo might need to think about this one and rewrite it, add some more lines here or there.... thanx for entering and best of luck in the contest!
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