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Sweet Kerosene Glow

Voices and noises
All spinning in my head
A twisted way to think of me
As I am now dead

A person with such a grace
A beautiful disguise
A pretty face to hide the tears
Oh so many have I cried

I lay in the soft grass
The bitter sweet romance
Hiding in sweet smelling lavender
My darkest fears dance

 

Here and now

We can't hide

From the bitter truth

I am still trapped in my hell

Hiding my face from you

 

You now know

The reason why I fled your arms

Such a warm embrace

The scent of you shall never fade away

 

In my wake I leave no hope

No beacon of truth and light

In my wake I give to you

A daemon in disguise

 

Once again

I think about

How I tried to break free

The chains, the pains, my enemies

They can't touch me

 

As I watch in horror

As the shadows slay me

Over and over again

I think of the people

All gathering to beat me

Oh; what a beautiful sound

 

I tried to fix it

I tried to help

I tried to take the pain

I tried my damnest, and look where I landed

Heart broken and unwound

 

I hide my face

Once again, hating how it feels

I feel so weak knowing such things

And hating you so much it's profound

 

No longer can you hurt me

I am bulletproof

A heart shattered but always healed

My dreams may never come true

 

Save me from my own device

So selfish and untrue

My words sting like the tears in your eyes

As I slowly leave from you

Author notes

Um, Xgeekdreamgonewrong.
Once again, pains. This one is lost love. I happen to know the subject very well.

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  • whiterabbit.
    August 13, 2007
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    I really like the imagery here. This is really a great write. I like it a lot. =]


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    July 30, 2007

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    wow...this is soooooo good! excellent work Jess this poem was written beautifully! Full of heartbreak and other strong emotions!!!


    -Steve-

  • dyingheart
    July 24, 2007

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    your poem is so beautiful and I adore the part about the bitter sweet romance hiding in sweet smelling lavender, you are a very gifted poet and don't let anybody tell you otherwise.


  • xandercheerios
    July 22, 2007

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    I honestly think that most people who write poetry are people who have KNOWN love, or KNOW love, and most often have lost it at one point. Very awesome subject... but you are not very consistant with the style, it's just really all over the place. Sometimes it rhymes like abcb, then it doesn't rhyme for a bit, then the last line of 4 consecutive verses rhyme. That in itself isn't specifically bad, but because it does mess with the flow of the poem, I'm hard-pressed to see anything great beyond the content. Even in free verse poetry, there should be flow, and could often have a rhythm, or use alliteration, and other poem characteristics. Unfortunately I didn't see any...