I wonder,
pen in hand,
and watch the everchanging sky,
while cows graze lazily
in fields beyond my garden fence.
Housemartins chatter,
busy feeding young.
I watch as I decide which moment
in my life I'd choose
to be my heaven.
My childen sleeping safely
in their beds,
the cat curled up
contented with his friend
the dog.
I wonder ...
I rack my brain,
pen in hand
to choose my personal heaven,
and remember friends and family:
the times I've laughed with them.
amazing jungle trecks
and wonderous mountain views.
Which would I choose?
I wonder ...
Now fragrant wafts of scented stock
invade my thoughts,
a ruby, blazing sun sinks,
glorious,
behind the distant, purple hills.
I watch, enthralled and
pen in hand,
I wonder ...
A contest entry
- Personal Heaven By Delightfulmess & Pure Thought by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended July 31, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very nice
This is a great way to spend your day! the things you describe most take for granted and yet they are the most wonderful! This really is Heaven. I loved it, The Shaker
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Hoodwinked!
A first person narrative that almost all poets and writers esperience. 'The wonder of it all' leaves us sometimes with a glowing, wrm felling.
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Hood-Winked!
This is such a powerful poem - you make me want to be right there beside you in the world that you are describing
I love the little details that make this poem wonderful (like the cat and dog) - warm and comforting - and well written! I have enjoyed reading your poetry and Hood-Winking you I hope you like it too!
Keep writing
Polly
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Perhaps now is a perfect time for you to revisit this poetic delight and remind yourself of these lovely things, my friend...
It is an enchanting piece, and I found myself standing right beside you, experiencing each image as you painted them on the page.
Fanstastic! Just what I needed to cheer me up!
(It's 5:55am and I've been up since around 2:30am ~ the best time to be alone and focussed, so here I am! )
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Me thinks you wonder not,
surrounded by beauty and love, you are living heaven. Never forget that wonderful thing.
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LOL I dont know if I would personly want an eternity of pondering but each to there own
But this was a wonderfully penned write
really enjoyed it thank you so much for entering.
Delila
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