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Alchemist

Alchemist, you made a treasure

out of this four-chambered vessel

of blood-

 

a faith from the crushed rocks

of fantasies

that weathered as they dashed against

silence. 

 

You pulled it out of the mine,

it became yours. 

 

It is your gold,

your alchemy. 

 

Hang it as a medal around yourself

and let me people know

that triumph is yours.

 

That you have won

me. 

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  • Danna Hobart
    July 30, 2007
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    Ah, it's not a compliment to be only a trophy. Thanks for entering. I really enjoyed this.


  • museamuse
    July 23, 2007
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    creative!

    i loved the flow of the first 2 lines, and the rest was interesting and thought provoking,


  • Sonja
    July 22, 2007

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    Interesting poem and interesting point of view - reality out of reality... Alchemist, a kind of sour and bitter message but as so short poetical expression, nice done.
    ~Sonja~