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[ Life’s Checklist ]

Life’s Checklist

Superficial family pictures
Forced smiles, first steps
Honor roll bumper sticker
First communion, frilly dress
Check…

[ Late night arguments
Holes in the wall
I’m sorry never seemed so generic]

Please, thank you, and may I
Robotic responses
Tucked in shirt, pleated skirt
Private school elite
Check…

[Dizzy with Jack
Dirty knees
Swallow my pride]

Salutatorian rank,
If only for complacency
Application fees, entrance exams
Dorm rooms, bunk beds
Check…

[Black out
Question sexuality
Bong Hits] 

Painfully mind-numbing Professors
APA, MLA, Chicago style perfected
Endless annotation, Quantitative data
Graveyard of ink cartridges
Check...

[Plagiarism, cheat sheets
Crushed Adderall
Penny drafts] 

Endless Debt, Monthly payments
Dead end job, No benefits
Get married, have children
Superficial family pictures

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  • whiterabbit.
    August 6, 2007

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    This is so creative. I love it. Everything starts out seeming so artificially perfect and then it just goes down from there. I love all the descriptions you used(eek I love adderall, but I'm being good now). Great job.


  • Menace
    August 5, 2007

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    I love how it all starts and ends with those superficial family pictures. This is very creative. I also like the timeline use. I honestly suck at timeline themes.


  • prisms
    August 3, 2007

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    Life can be so harsh and still completely monotonous. You captured that very well in this write. The style, with "check" spattered throughout (like a checklist, hence the title of course), worked really well in bringing out the point I think you were trying to make.

    My favorite stanza:
    "Late night arguments
    Holes in the wall
    I’m sorry never seemed so generic"
    For some reason that tugged at me harder than anything else written in the poem, and that's saying something, because the whole piece really dug into my heart.

    Excellent.


  • A Poet Named Kyoto
    July 21, 2007

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    This poem would be perfect for Option 3, but it fits well wit 4 as well...either way it is a brilliant poem, I love the style of it, it has great flow, quite original!