Tomorrow was supposed to be brighter.
Things were supposed to be perfect again.
You were to be mine.
I was to be yours.
I could see the light.
Tomorrow's brightness almost blinding.
People don't understand,
how dark the light can be.
I thought I saw your future.
That future wasn't with me.
I'm being plagued.
Plagued by saddness and depression.
I have to hide it all from you.
Telling you these lies will kill me.
When you lose something you love,
a peice of your soul goes with it.
Author notes
When it all comes down to it, I can't fully express what I feel. I just know it's bad. Very bad.
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Awww this poem made me feel sad... I thought hope was coming and then it went again
. Beautifully written though, I've been here though... I thought I'd have someone to guide me, but they ended up leading me to hell. Nicely wrote.
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Actually, you did a pretty good job telling how you feel in this peice. I like it. I love the clear emotions you put into writing it... "I'm being plaugued
Plagued by saddness and depression" that's the line that stood out to me... I think "Saddness" tho is supposed to be "sadness" i odnt' know... maybe not... I can't spell... lmao. great work, again! keep it uP!
Crimson -
You take me to a valley I preferred not to return to. But I appreciate the journey.. Loss is loss & no amount of sugar coat, can make it taste like something gained. Perhaps that piece of "you" will be as seed, and help them grow into something so much better than they could ever be alone.. Just something, to think on.. Beautifully sad & heartfelt write..
Highness...
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deep with emotions great write dear you let loose the hurt and pin as always great write dear
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Deep Blaze...
very powerful feelings here, I can feel you venting and wanting to express much more...this is wonderful and a start to resolve what is deep inside the walls of our hearts and grooves of our minds...keep writing Blaze,
Strength and Respect for you,
Ephiphany -
This is so true and something I can relate to,
This touched me deeply.
Hugs onesugar
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that is really good
just don't kill yourself
cause the people u help will say
wow and i thought i had problems
i am here taking advice from a suicider
anyways i loved it
love
waterroxie
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I was just reading your comment devin. Oh how much it hurts... Devin you dont know how much i love you. you are like my best friend. its almost embarrassing to say that im crying right now. But like i was saying... I was reading about how you never left reality. It just hurt to hear you say that. I dont know if thats a statement of sanity or a cry for help. Just as you listen to me, I listen to you.
Love, Victoria.
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All right, Devs, spill it. What's going on now? I know this feeling. The one where you think everything is going great, then yo usort of snap yourself back into reality andrealize it's not as you saw or imagined. I wish you the best of luck dealing with this road block, but don't hurt yourself trying to get through it because we all love you and wouldn't want anything to happen to you. Remember that.
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What you guessed I was feeling, is not what I'm feeling. I thought things were going to be good, but I was never snapped back into reality. I was always in reality. I never left reality.
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This is really sad, but very good. I admire this poem. Keep it up!
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