Bubbling brew tapped from warmth of vein
Sipped with parched lips and keen fangs
Acidic ale of men and women
Night stalkers commodity, a deadly venom
Crimson hue, with a twang
A contest entry
- prompt----5[pif if you want to] by layla..
300 points, ended July 23, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice interpretation of the prompt
Good luck! -
poor Mary had to die to feed the vampyre in your heart.
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This is just great! It really shows thoughtfulness, and careful attention to phrasing. You have grown as a poet since your worst write!
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Ah Yes! I kinda thought this poem would have fangs, and such. LOL I love the title. Good luck in the contest. Excellent imagery and a pleasurable read no matter how dark and vampire-ish (is that a word?) LOL
April
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nice gothic touch ... vampire verse i tell you ... a blood sucking stanza ... its macabre and I like it. full marks.
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wow! this is very well-penned!~ great job!
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