You made it hard to think
You made it hard to breathe
You make it hard to believe
That you ever loved me.
Once the walls came down
And you got in
My mind was turned into
Your personal playground
for sin.
I can’t seem to concentrate
Or get my head on straight
And I don’t know how to handle
What’s going on.
What more can I do,
when I’ve already
Admitted that I was wrong?
You can’t you forgive me
Why can’t you see
That you’re the only one
That’s killing me.
Author notes
Run - Snow Patrol
'Yes I read the rules'
A contest entry
- Options Galore by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended August 3, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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YOU NEEEEEEED TO SINGG!!!
You really should refine your singing so that you can roll these on to lyrics. Because your writings are very, very well done and flow extremely well. And, as the contest dood said, they almost read like lyrics. And if you intended for them to be lyrics, then the most assuredly would come out as lyrics and be a KICK ASS SONG.
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I liked the flow of this and the thoughts, it almost read like a lyric on its own, the only line that seemed awkward was the 1st line of the last stanza, it didn't read quite right, if you check you will see what I mean. It is either 'you can't forgive me' or why can't you forgive me'
All in all a lovely entry. Love, C
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