Honey, this is more than a tragedy
A romance doomed to be an imitation
Of love
Nothing more than a burning
Addition
Two violent hearts
Taken by glitter && madness
Me__;
I am a shadow in mascara
Incomplete in my mistakes
Yearning to live a life on more
Than faded dreams
Waking up alone after
Nightmares && restless sleep
In an empty hotel bed
Wishing for more than
Running in circles
I'm afraid of change
You__;
A desperate boy fighting on the
Pavement outside the club
Pistol in his hands
&& a raging God complex in his mind
Bleeding in three places
smelling of cheap cigarettes
Far from sober[[CheaperVodka]]
Running on speed
Fear__;
I'd hate to sound cliche
But you look so cute when
When you're angry
How pathetic of me
ThereWasNoUs__;
Sweetheart, what will it take
For you to realise I
Don't
Love you[[NeverHave]]
I wasn't even in it for the
Sex
I may have been a demanding
Lover, but you were no
Diamond in the sack
So I faked a smile, sugar
&& told you it was
[[OhSoGreat!!]]
If there is one thing I'm
Good @ it's lying
&& you were blinded by my
[Fake]sugarcoated words
Cuz telling the truth
Wasn't on my agenda
That night
ThereWasNoYou__;
It's not like you never lied
Either
&& I could tell when
You lied cuz
Your goddamn mouth moved
ThereNeverWillBeAYou__;
So next time I see you
I'll disregard every
Word you say
&& where I used
To say "YES"
I'll replace it
With a "FUCK YOU"
Epitaphos__;
Here lays a boy
With more broken
Hearts left in his wake
Than anyone should have
&& then the day came
When he realized his mistakes
He took his life on the traintracks
R.I.P.
Author notes
I used a HUGE amount of words from a wordbank. Go me!
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Sometimes I get so mad about this Karl thing I feel like turning around to him and saying, 'you wasn't even any good in bed' but I know I'd be lying
Great write here darl, it speaks a lot of what some of us don't like to admit or to say to the person, in fear or without knowing how to say it. Keep it up.
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This is........just.......amazing. I'm trying to pick my favorite lines but I simply can't. There's always some parts in your poems that I can relate to, always, and this one sure has a lot. I love this, it's so wonderful. Insomnia is sure paying off because I'm finding all these amazing writes that I should have read earlier.
Okay here, I think this just might be my favorite part.
ThereWasNoUs__;
Sweetheart, what will it take
For you to realise I
Don't
Love you[[NeverHave]]
I wasn't even in it for the
Sex
I may have been a demanding
Lover, but you were no
Diamond in the sack
So I faked a smile, sugar
&& told you it was
[[OhSoGreat!!]]
If there is one thing I'm
Good @ it's lying
&& you were blinded by my
[Fake]sugarcoated words
Cuz telling the truth
Wasn't on my agenda
That night
I L~O~V~E this (in case you couldn't tell already). You're brilliant sweetie. Sorry for rambling a bit, but wonderful job.
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Wow, this was such an intense read, I was really sad when it ended. But wow, I'm just...my heart is pounding in my chest so hard, 1st time it's happened mind you. This is definitely DirtyPretty poetry at it's best. From line one to the last one, I promise you, you are an ah-may-zing, writer, hell I might have to make up a new word to describe you!
Like Superfabilicious! Or Awesomestraightupaddicting.
Don't doubt your talent honey. You are MARVELOUS!! -
&& I could tell when
You lied cuz
Your goddamn mouth moved
loveddd those lines the most! this is an amazing mean yet oh-so fucking charm piece of art. god..i cant even tell you how much i loved it. great job darling
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goddd i love hold cold and heartless this was at parts, and yet how you still let some softer emotional sides peek through... seriously awesome write!
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liked it
whatthe fuck is dirty pretty. i liked it. its sucks that it made the narrator sound like a heartless bitch. it had a lot of truth though. liked the line breaks. didnt like the epitaph part. dont really know why.
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I love this
My favvorite lines were
" So I faked a smile, sugar
&& told you it was
[[OhSoGreat!!]]
If there is one thing I'm
Good @ it's lying
&& you were blinded by my
[Fake]sugarcoated words
Cuz telling the truth
Wasn't on my agenda
That night"
They really brought it to life for me♥
All I need to know is who do you want to be?
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