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From Across the Night

evacuating memories float amidst painful skies
evasively laughing at yesterday's tears
i stare down to this painted vision,
flat euphoria, the only essence of you

inflammation of the heart, burnt heartache
a creation, masterpiece created from thee
you won the gold, i applaud, you die
tainted forgiveness from accross the night

empty soul sits in computer chair
strung out on the never- has- been
pondering hope, waiting in despair
for what?

i dream a thought, an abscence of him
such delight in the weakened mule
no longer a coward, she stands upright
disgusted by this dastardly fool

"follow the scum, rotten tunnels to the hell,(>she points>)
I care not, you bastard!"
....you get what you earn in the never...
she says as she walks away

ocean serenity paints itself on her memory
mother nature opens her arms to me as her child
'weep in sorrow til the mourn, Little Heather'
and i cry bitter coldness, holding
for the morrow.





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Wind Whisper
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Author notes

.....heather is a type of flower....
you have to have a strong mind to understand this one.
and in the visions, there is a series of two

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i'm sure this one is a bit confusing, but in short it
is dedicated to my x and mother who just recently
passed away. you would have to know the story behind
to comprehend all of the bitter coldness i feel towards
them, but unnecessary to be shared.
the poem is written for creativity, and to each one
his own interrpretation. hope you enjoy

A contest entry

havent written in a while, so figured i'd put in some effort

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Comments

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  • Rita Krocha
    November 18, 2007

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    Oh my goodness this is something so amazingly done! Very deep and so very sad.....I especially love the title~ across the night


  • GloriousGift
    September 21, 2007

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    WOW, amazing

    I like every feature in here

    Thnx for ur entry & Best of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba

  • Angel With No Halo
    July 26, 2007

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    I know how much you have been through... and this is just a piece of the nutshell. Your emotions stand true here my dear. It really is hard when all those memories come back to haunt you.. and especially the bad ones.. like a nightmare.. playing over and over again. You have such courage and beauty in your soul.. and I hope you never lose that!! You are an amazing person my sweet friend, and you do not deserve to have to sit there and be reminded of all those memories.Thank you for entering hon Oh and the poem was written to perfection hon.. as always with your lovely words!!

    Love,
    ~Krys~


  • Girl With Guitar silver member
    July 22, 2007
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    I've read this before...

    But reading this in a different light now makes it more dark somehow. Also thanks for telling me what the reference to "heather" was

    "you won the gold, i applaud, you die" I love the stiffness of this line, turns something great into something dark but amazingly written. Very well done

    Bandaid.

  • marc creamore
    July 20, 2007

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    Dawn . . . a most painful read to say the least . . . your heart is raw, honest and wide open to your emotions . . . keep the ink of your pen flowing, there are riches there! WELL DONE!!


  • robert bolin
    July 20, 2007

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    Wowsers This was very painful for me to read because it brings back so many memories of whats going on with
    Me today, And as I set here drinking my life away one drop at a time, the tears once again start falling from my eyes, Though sad and painful I felt your heart ache pouring onto the page, As if you were visiting my life through each line on this open page thank you for sharing your work with me here on all poetry and for allowing me to read and comment on your work rob..


    • Summer Dawn
      July 20, 2007
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      thank you robert, sorry to hear you're drinking tonight. everyone has their cradle, but ya gotta grasp a hold once in a while. wake up and realize there's only one chance. its short. this is it. what will u do with it?
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