An undiscovered beauty and her daughter
Sit alone on the beach,
Yearning to be pulled out
Of a world of fairy tales.
Mother gently combs through her child's hair,
With her delicate fingertips,
As their dress of scales
Sparkle magnificently in the sun.
She fears for her daughter,
For she is so young and inexperienced.
She has yet to be informed
About the dangers of the world above.
She wishes that her daughter would stay
Eternally in this hidden world of mermaids,
But she knows that one day or another,
Her daughter will have to deal with the humans.
She just doesn't want her daughter
To end up like her husband. . .
Author notes
Written while waiting for Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows to come out. I'm reading it now!
Cpntest: This was inspired by "The Little Mermaid" title. I'm 11.
A contest entry
- Movie Titles - Ages 12 and Younger ONLY by Kari.
300 points, ended July 23, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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YOU ARE ELEVEN??
Wow!
This is an amazing write!!
Thanks so much for sharing and congrats on the silver!
♥ Ann
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Thanks!
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kinda creepy...
but i like it, especially the cliffhanger ending. nice descriptions, but it's very short...
P.S. i'm a Harry Potter fan, too.
Check out my poems "Loony Luna's Diary" and "A Mermaid's Song". **
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I love it. The descriptiveness is amazing. It is a very interesting perspective.
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i agree wonderful job
it has a nice soft rhythm to it
i like the second stanza the best
and good luck with the contest
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!
I can close my eyes and see mother and child sitting upon a rock by the sea and the mother stroking her daughters hair while they sit there quietly.
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Aw, wow you did very good here, and I enjoyed this piece very much. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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