Bittersweet; sweet aroma of intoxication -
liquid powders drawn;
a syringe of ultimate highs.
[tap tap tap]
Needle nose into rotting veins,
injection of regret -
in too deep to stop;
addicted.
[tap tap tap]
Wake up call;
bright lights and EMTs -
traveling the tunnel to abyss.
Can't be real; must be illusion...
overdose of [crystal] meth.
[tap tap tap]
Another day;
a lesson learned -
yet still driven to feed
that neverending
addiction.
Author notes
Took years to get over my addictions. I never really like writing about them. This is a new form for me. I've never been a fan of bracket writing, but I think it fits well. Enjoy.
A contest entry
- ♥[Addiction]♥ What sucks you in? by Salt Therapy.
450 points, ended July 30, 2007, 18 entries
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Really good poem.
Wow, I really really like this poem! Good job!
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I LOVE IT!! GROOVY WRITE !! It's really hard to put ourselves out there, it's really hard to put our emotions and addictions out for all to see, even if they know, it's putting it in words that are in their face for them to read that is difficult. I think you crossed that barrier so well. I'm not sure how your doing on the inside, but your writing is wonderful.
Namaste'
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I LOVEEEEEE IT <3333
You rock love.
And I wish I could write like you.
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Wow! This is very well written! I loved the form of how you wrote it. Ahhmazing=]
It's sad some people have these addictions. You wrote this very well! Amazing piece!
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I like this write, it really gets to me... it reminds me of some of my family members and their addictions.... awesome write
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i like this
you've definitely tapped into addiction especially the lies you tell yourself... over and over again despite losing everything.
solid write
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Yes the brackets fit well in this poem and the topic you write about - liked the flow, and the opening/conclusion. Those of us who have never been in these situations can get a feel somewhat of what this addiction in like. Do like the form used, flow and grip this has when reading.
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well done, creative
you def fit the bracket writing well here, it sparked my imagination to really visualize the sound and action of tapping. addiction are rough, i actually just posted a poem i wrote for myself about them. you never writing, writing them could help? i love your creativity of the first line looking through the eyes of the mind with addiction comparing the drug to almost an ambrosia. I pictured nectar or an aphrodisiac. the first 2 verses pulled me in very creative, talented!
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superb
It's good to write about it and this write is great. -
Too fucking wonderful Kris. Pwned Thanks for entering dear, good lucky! ~ Kerri
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Yeah so basically this one freaked me. I don't think I have any addictions, other than maybe, well, you know. And being in love. Caring about people. Yeah, I'm definitely addicted to caring about people.
Your writes never stop improving.
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