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in the absence of bakeries



 


There isn't a bakery in town to speak of
save the day-old store over
on the corner of Main and Elm St.
that never sees more than 2 parked cars
a day.  No greeting of cinnamon
in the morning or hot powdered doughnuts
to fill the senses when I
fling open my doors and step out on the balcony.
No coffee shop or art gallery, either.
Refinement is found only on the bridge
leading into town, teenage love stories
written in spray paint
and last week saw the appearance
of a smiley face next to the blaring red
statement about catching the next train out.
Its author must have also realized
the importance of a local bakery.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

i have no idea where this actually came from. . . except noticing our small town doesn't even have a damn doughnut shop!

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  • bozoloper
    February 7, 2008

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    I like this a lot. I particularly like the image of the spray paint conversation. Life's tough when you can't get good bread!


  • Blkwidow77 silver member
    July 28, 2007

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    I bookmarked this. This is good. This is really good.

    It struck a cord with me. It was the accumulation of all my fears with John. Like all of it rolled into the dough of my thoughts. A stick ball that you can't swallow at all.

    A small town. I did not realize that you live in such a truly small and undeveloped town. No coffee shop? Do you know where I've lived and grown up? But L.A. and Detroit. Two of the largest and most developed cities in the US. When I was forced to my great grandmother's town she grew up in Illonios for a week, I thought I would die. And even that town had a donut shop.

    I'm probably all bent because I know that John had allusions of us getting together and then I would just magically become a 'country girl' like the kind he's always known.

    It was a shock that he thought that. It was a shock to him, to realize what a concrete flower I am. I want wide sidewalks and ashalts. High rises and sterile white carpet...

    My god. He grew up on a horse farm that was miles from any 'town'!! And he thought to drag me back there with him, if we got together! Can you imagine! That last time I went to the country was years ago in Tennessee to a log cabin where my aunt got married in the hills. They did not mow the lawn (if there was one) and the grass sometimes came to my chin. Not to mention the bees as big as volkswagon beetles! I hid in the car.

    Anyways, obviously your poem is highly effective. You've given me hives of the thoughts it triggers in the images and tone. I'm not sure if I should thank or curse you.


    • Annalise
      July 30, 2007
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      LOL Yes... it's small town here.

      I grew up on a plot of land so far away from a town that one couldn't walk (or ride bikes) into it. A town that had 1 mini-IGA and a dairy bar that couldn't stay in business for very long. When we went trick-or-treating, you could cover the town in an hour.

      I've only lived in one town that had a doughnut shop. One. Even the next city over just did get a starbucks... and that's only because it is in the new Krogers (grocery store). Crazy world I live in.

      I just did find this message. AP didn't want me to know about it.

      • Blkwidow77 silver member
        August 20, 2007
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        You know... that frightens me.

        What would you do, if I pulled you onto my sidewalks? Would you be able to breathe without the trees? To live beyond where you can drive or bicycle... what madness!

        I shudder at the prospect.

        My skin prickles when the weeds brush my ankles accidently. I love nature.. as long as it cannot touch me. lol

        Fascinated by bugs, as well, under the same pretext.


  • passionvine
    July 27, 2007

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    I have become fond of the spirit of negation in composing poetry, and you do it very well here. The “2” pops out and I am wondering in “two” would work better. The image of the spray painting is my favorite – I use such spontaneous expressions as landmarks when traveling the back roads of Ohio when I am home.

    Peace.


  • Lj-
    July 25, 2007
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    Very interesting.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    July 22, 2007
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    Never underestimate the power of warm fresh bread.
    I could use a good bakery myself.


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 20, 2007

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    "No greeting of cinnamon
    in the morning or hot powdered doughnuts
    to fill the senses when I
    fling open my doors and step out on the balcony."

    Nooo...what horrendous treatment, my Friend. I used to manage a donut shop when I was 15. Later on, my sister opened one of her own & my mom worked her magic there. I can't imagine...no fresh apple fritters, no cheese danishes??? You poor baby. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Wanda

  • zara
    July 20, 2007

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    The French have it right, every two-bit (two-franc?) village has several bakeries, and people make an early trek to their family favourite every day, to have fresh baguette for breakfast. (How they determine favourites is beyond my ability to discern - they are all fantastic.)

    I love the notion of grafitti on the bridge as local high culture. Very cool poem; thank you for entering.

    Z


  • grm
    July 20, 2007

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    i like this, but not your town.
    this afternoon i had an irresistble craving for a fresh french bagette. so i promptly went out and got one.
    and i live in a small town, too. there are at least 4 bakeries here.
    hoo hah!


  • The Bear
    July 20, 2007

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    Well I make you envious now yes? Next door to us is the french gourmet chef's premises where he cook and bake all manner of mouth watering goodies for to sell to people who go to the shop, but also for the posh hotels, weddings, and big functions, in the town and the smell drift in here in the morning to wake us up. It is actually a very cruel torture. Stef says this street once had 4 bakeries and 4 butchers all within 150 yards. The smell of fresh bread is necessary to the quality of life.
    I enjoy this poem partly I like to read of places and obviously because I like your style- I cannot pinpoint it exactly, but there is something unique about your poems. I think perhaps it is crispness.

    • Annalise
      July 21, 2007
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      Yes. Very envious.

      I use to work in a factory next to the place where they make Dunkin Donuts. They aren't anything to speak of, really . . . but when the wind picked up the sweet scent of sugar and fried dough at 4 a.m. it smelled as close to heaven as I could think of.

      Thank you.


  • S A Adelmann
    July 20, 2007
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  • misselaineous
    July 20, 2007
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