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Simply Love

Those saucy eyes entangle me in a web
My pleasures disclosed in an instant


I have sold my wayward ways for you
You have mapped my path of destiny


A ruddy complexion washes over my waxen features
As my heart becomes enlightened with acceptance


My past has been ground into dust
With your splendid acceptance of my love


You have me mesmerized as you smile
I float on your outstretched palm


I have eventually become your organized chaos

 

 

 

Author notes

I have used all the words in order and have come up with a story of falling in love - it is simple, but I hope you enjoy the read *smile*

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  • Tattboy silver member
    August 6, 2007

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    "I have sold my wayward ways for you
    You have mapped my path of destiny"

    you beautifully and succinctly describe the giving up of oneself to lover and to ones lover.

    Well done, this really deserved the Gold.

    YLM


  • Star Shine
    July 20, 2007
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    Very nice, "I float on your outstretched palm" is an awesome phrase, wonderful, great entry.


  • HaleyMary
    July 20, 2007

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    Beautiful write. I liked the first line the best. I think the eyes of a person can be very mesmerizing. When I meet someone I like the eyes are the first thing I notice about a person. the windows to the soul. Good luck in the contest.


  • HeavenScent4U
    July 20, 2007

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    wow, this is wonderful swetie you made great use of the word bank and this story is full of emotion and telling. great job. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed