gargoyle monsters stride the land
kissed by glowering sun
power leeches from the hands
of those monstrous feral rapists
silently passing on
unaware of price yielded
by trusting earth
Author notes
This is written in response to apicture prompt of a setting sun that (just) captures electric power pylons in silhouette.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration Running 5 Days Only! by DancingShadowCorpse.
300 points, ended July 29, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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'unaware of [the] price yeilded'...
This is really good. It needs a few commas but other than that, it is beautiful and a wonderful use of the prompt picture! -
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Thanks for your warm comments on my "rape" which give me pleasure. On the question of commas: I consciously left them out as I felt that I could so do. I shall bear your suggestion in mind though. Thanks again
Donald
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