The dams were strong, built solid,
then came the hurricane called "YOU"
You came in quickly, I unsuspecting
leaving your mark, a vivid memory.
Your destruction intense, unrepairable,
left sitting among the ruins of myself.
In a moments silence tears are shed,
releasing the love that once lived.
The minds images begin crumbling,
the dams heart weaken, no longer strong.
The river of torment becomes vicious,
demise evident, among rivers release.
Every memory tearing at the shore,
till it can no longer withstand the rage.
The bath of the blood sea thrashing,
until wrist dams crumble and collapse.
The Wrist Rivers flow ever so freely,
as the warmth merges with the cold sea.
Life and death united, no longer at odds,
destruction left nothing behind, not even me.
Author notes
"Lycan lore, wholesome whore, breatheren bred, bloody bed!" eyesofanangel524..option 3
A contest entry
- Life isn't everything, Death isn't nothing 1000+ point contest, LOTS OF OPTIONS!~Still open!!!~ by Soten-Jaganshi.
1100 points, ended September 7, 2007, 62 entries
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An intense poem filled with strong and powerful imagery. Although it's very sad you have created something amazing.
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Brilliant metaphor. I've never seen suicide done so subtly, you almost don't even realize it (and I'll feel really really stupid if I'm completely wrong).
The destruction that the pain leaves behind is so clear and evident, the emotions really come through. It's amazing that one person can have had us love and feel so much that it comes down to devastation when that love is taken away, regardless of how the loss occurred. Such intense grief and mourning that we can't bring ourselves to fight and live through it. It's just an amazing concept.
Did I already say you have a way with words? Yeah, I'm sure I did...but you know...when it's true, it just is
Love this!
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it's quite interesting. I found it hard to get into the rhythm, but the word usage was wonderful, and the imagery spectacular. Thank you for entering my contest!
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Such Wonderous Emotions
Very seldom have I ever encountered someone with the ability to envoke such an emotional response as when i read you, for you have touched my soul in ways that no one has before you and no one will again ty so much for being the greatest love this poet has ever known and for everything you are to me for with you i am truly blessed, much love, honor and respect to you my muse.....jack
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