It was the dry mouth
that opened and closed
over
and
over
that told me I was empty.
Devoid of feeling
numb to the point of purple
I could surface~
can't we all
just for a breath
a glimmer
of hope?
But why?
When around us
people fall
like fat bruised cherries
pits ripped out
the softness
squashed
trampled underfoot
The only thing
better/worse
is ignorance.
Author notes
"Perhaps when we find ourselves wanting everything, it is because we are dangerously close to wanting nothing."
- Sylvia Plath
In a list
A contest entry
- My mind is in overdrive [Quote inspired contest] by Confetti Fairy-x.
1110 points, ended July 25, 2007, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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nice write--
inspirational.
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"When around us
people fall
like fat bruised cherries
pits ripped out
the softness
squashed
trampled underfoot"
omg... this is sensational.
you havent completely followed the rules...
but this poem is stunning.
"numb to the point of purple"
what an incredible line.
i love this.
x
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ahh at first I couldn't see what you meant.. then I realized it was because I didn't explain the depth.. that quote hit home for me simply because I want nothing. I feel as the poem said empty?
It is so hard to explain the emotions of the heart/soul. More so when you think that the world is numb to the point of recklessness?
Anyhow Thank you so much for the bronze and I am glad you enjoyed my write..
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oh no... i thought the depth was explained perfectly it is a beautiful poem.
what i meant about the rules was that you didnt put your name in the comment box.
no biggie.
Thanks for entering and you deserved the bronze.
<3 Con x
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