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a footstep and a curse

I can't pray
    my way out of this one;
My heart and your rose,
    a conflicting note-

  I sleep away the days;
as you walk by my grave.

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  • Nuclear
    September 13, 2007

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    The rose made me think of Emily.
    Was it supposed to do that?


    Short stuff from you is great,
    but I prefer the long amazingness of BLISSFUL DOOM


    • Fireworks
      September 13, 2007
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      Nuh uh... it was my collection of rose petals from Zach.


  • TheClosestThing
    July 20, 2007
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    I like this, it was short but the length worked for this particular piece.


  • thenewblack
    July 20, 2007
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    short and to the point

    i love it