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+ Enemy Mine + + +

Missing image

Spiritual seamstress,

   no longer beckoned,

               anger,

          ripped, from placenta of new birth ~

 

       Lips of guarded mosaic,

sewn, from parched hatred,

              Lovers, hollow inside,

    filled with emptiness ~

 

Brittle touch of primal dreams,

       forgotten,

    gardens of enemy mine,

               shared alone ~

 

       Devoured by lust and greed,

                feverish groins,

          lay womb aside,

 for pleasures ~

Author notes

Prompt:

 

Picture inspired ~

 

I'll give you thirty minutes

&

you give me 50 brilliant words!



Think outside the box please!


Anyone writing about the prompt in such
a sense that they are telling/showing me exactly
what the prompt is will not win, I'm sorry!




It would be nice if the winner of this quickie
would pay it forward and host another quickie
to keep the chain of quickies flowing

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

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Comments

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  • StarEyes
    July 20, 2007

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    My Dearest Uncle,

    Oh My, you have described this soooooo very well! I have been there a few times, and well, yeah you are right. I hope someday, to find myself again, the person I was before the rape happened, but I don't think I will, as it has several years, and I have come a long way, but, I am ok.

    Ok, sorry, I am ranting here. You did a great job on this one!! Congrats on the well deserved Bronze!

    and much love always

    Nyetta


  • tawk gold member
    July 20, 2007

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    I can so relate to your write, my soul is still lost to the rape. I hope to one day find it again. Thanks for writing such a heartfelt piece about how a rape affects you, for the rest of your life. Excellent imagery and emotion, congrats on the Bronze


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    July 20, 2007

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    This is an awesome poem. I could feel the sadness. I know when I saw the picture it made me think of my ex Greg. The of the words is great. Enjoyed the read!!!

  • Aurora Ceres
    July 19, 2007

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    'gardens of enemy mine, shared alone'

     So, tell me what you really see within this image? Wow, this is such a powerfully provocative take for the prompt. To be honest, I am not sure I know exactly what you are trying to convey! I'm going with what one loses when one gives in to 'sinful' desires. Akin to 'selling one's soul' for pleasures of the flesh or anything secular. Please feel free to fill me in if I am not on the right track. Best of luck to you.

    Best wishes,
    Bella


    • Arkbear gold member
      July 19, 2007

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      Bella ~

      This is about a woman who was brutally raped, dismembered and discarded ~

      These are the thoughts of her soul ~

      Bear ~

      • Aurora Ceres
        July 19, 2007
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        Bear

        Embarrassed as I am, I see that now. I am truly in awe. Thank you for setting me straight.

        Bella


  • poetsruletheworld
    July 19, 2007
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    Beautiful write, an especially vivd take on the prompt..


  • lavender shadows
    July 19, 2007

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    oh wow! What a powerful ending. *sighs* mhm, I can totally see how you got this from the prompt. I love how you wrote this, it's so eloquent - and hits hard. Wonderfully done!


  • Twins 4 me
    July 19, 2007
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    This is beautifully written with strong emotion. Excellent write! Best wishes to you!


  • Celticmoon
    July 19, 2007

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    A very strong piece here Bear. Your words contain power that demands others to listen to the messages within the words. Thank you for entering and good luck!


    Blessings
    Bel

    • Arkbear gold member
      July 19, 2007
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      Thank you Bel ~

      Great piece of Art to inspire this write ~

      Bear ~~


  • Celticmoon
    July 19, 2007
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    Starting this now and will judge when received 2 more entries to close contest.


    Your prompt is: Primal Calls


    Or


    The picture on main page

  • Aurora Ceres
    July 19, 2007
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    Clicking random...will have to come back and check out your musings.

    Bella

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