She stands looking out at the empty sky,
Emotions buzzing throughout her insides,
[dead] emotions: on sadness they rely,
In her mind, with wordless lies they reside,
Words caught in her head, these words unspoken,
They swim around, pushing to get out,
Running down her arms with length unbroken,
These words not escaping her mouth - a shout,
Into her wrists she cuts to release : pain,
Out of her wrists these words they explode,
Creating a relief that will not remain,
In her blood: her emotion bestowed,
Healed over again, these cuts dam in,
These emotions: that are always within,
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wow there are al ot of pain that are coming from you wourds i hope what you wrote isn't happening to you.
But uhh the poem is good keep writing. You are so talent writer 4 only 15
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Great piece!!!!! Filled with emotion, hurt and sadness!!
Easy to read and comprehend!!!!! I really like this piece!!!!!!!!
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Cool....A sonnet (=..Good effort...The flow is generally great but sometimes its a little bumpy...
3stanza is great with more internal rhyme. (=
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This is amazing, i luv the amazing rhythym and the way it rhymes all the way until the very end. The imagery is powerful and very well, i love the sadness about this. This is really great. these lines rhymed amazingly
Into her wrists she cuts to release : pain,
Out of her wrists these words they explode,
Creating a relief that will not remain,
In her blood: her emotion bestowed
Great job! ur a talented writer..keep writing
love,
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What sad things you write about in these lines - good rhythm and rhyme, flow to this poem. Emotions are always there, and if not, then one is depressed and in dire straits as well.
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very good
i like this poem but its a bit morose, but it is very true, you cannot hide from emotions
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