curved
like a steel chip
coppice cloggies walloped
the cement with shards.
then, snow evaperated inwards
when a triangle shaped
shred of the wood excluded
sealed envelope on my toe.
now, the footwear is inert--
should I hand down?
Author notes
option six.
i walked in my dutch shoes a lot until a piece of the wood fell out.
A contest entry
- 20 lines or less by forgotten dream.
425 points, ended July 21, 2007, 19 entries
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Congrats on the gold trophy. Because my husband's family is Dutch I have seen many of their little clogs.
I DO NOT LIKE THEM!! They are so uncomfortable. I would honestly love to know whose bright idea wooden shoes was! 
Well this was a great entry! You did an excellent job bringing a clog to life... I do have to suggest a different background and font combination though. This hurts my eyes.
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I don't know if you meant this metaphorically or not, but metaphorically to me it talks about how people walk through life they obsurb a certain amount of hardship, and maybe this can make them a hard person to be around. Thank-you for the entry.
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I wasn't purposely using it metaphorically, but your perspective fits in side-by-side as someone seeing it externally.
I compliment you for commenting,
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Interesting...
Luv,
Candy
Contest Holder
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An extremely interesting write. Very unique. Congrats on your gold win!
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i really loved this piece. this is the type of write i was looking for in this contest -- something creative, descriptive, and refreshing. great word choices and imagery. a very strong piece for just ten lines. i liked the short stanza structure you used, and also the interesting choice of topic. it made me think of shoes i walked in until they fell apart (and how much trouble i had getting rid of them because i enjoyed them so much).
keep up the wonderful work. this was a pleasure to read. thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest <3
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very interesting piece, to bad for the shoe' wood falling out,
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