Oh God
you dwell up in the sky
I reside on this Earth
you are strengthened to enter on this Earth
while I am unskilled to land in your sky
my formation is insufferable
when I determine to maintain one step on Earth
and other step towards the sky
to make me triumphant to witness the nirvana
during my voyage on this Earth
Oh God...
Author notes
Based on the quote
" where the mind goes the men follows"
A contest entry
- pic inspired - word bank - or backgrounds by serenity silvermoon.
500 points, ended September 10, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GIVE ME YOUR HM FOR A CHANCETO WIN GOLD by esroddo.
450 points, ended September 21, 2007, 14 entries
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I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but I loved how your lines seemed to match the picture:
"when I determine to maintain one step on Earth
and other step towards the sky"
A short, but moving piece, thanks for sharing! -
Beautiful
All on earth suffer due to our materialistic attachments and as soon as God our spiritual glance fall on God's wisdom, we renounce the craps and move toward true wisdom where pain ends.
Well composed and honest poem, I liked it very much. -
You have such a Beauty with words!
No one would ever know you were not born here. You do make each word count.
I shall try to read more of yours and maybe learn more. Thanks foe the poem.
I am so impressed by all your awards. Jackle
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I like this
This is so strong,Truly powerful! A great interpretation of feelings towards the power of GOD and the desire to go home!
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MMM I think this is a reminder of just how far removed from perfection we really are while on this plane,,,it leaves me lost in thought... thank you...
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Wow..I can't really say anything else. Very deep and powerful, calling this "good" is an understatement.
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Very Nice
I really like this poem, it was short and sweet and that's good.
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Excellent Expresion
Because I search Beacause I have found... this write has caused me to seek again and...every door I knock upon is answered I knocked here and was given water for my thirst our growth is unlimited in God... in the word.. The imagery here can kindle inspire all who read and rest in reason. If it is soft there it is like a cotton ball with iron hidden in the center. All can enjoy the soft flow of a stream and to larger minds better yet souljahs... that stream is an ocean. Perception...Allah is as you percieve Him to be as He says He is Yes The God IS.....Namaste -
I like the softness and flow of this piece...thank you for your words...
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Wonderful piece
Amazing write thanks for entering Lisa
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excellent
the agony is genuine. nirvana can only be yours. wish you good luck!
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Beautiful
We are all seekers of the divines embrace that transcends mortal bounds and reconnect to that from whence we've come.
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A strong sense of frustration in this write...the eternal struggle to reach higher, be wholly and entirely a reflection of the creator's plan for us as individuals...and knowing we choose to limit our own growth...but knowing also He is able to reach down to us...always...Very well composed. Peace to you, Rhonda
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This is beautiful. I clicked my mouse to come here and the first thing I saw was the picture. I thought; "Oh boy, I'm going to like this!" This is so well thought out, its like a prayer to humble yourself before the creator. It's wonderful; not what I thought it would be but beautiful and inspiring.
Love,
Amera ♥
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