So many moments where I've wasted my time
looking for someone who wasn't there.
A friend, a companion, anyone with a pulse.
I'm not doing it anymore.
It's not like you would really care.
You call me all the time,
but you only want to rant or cry.
When I want to talk it's like,
"oh shit! see you later and goodbye."
I don't even blame you.
I never talk anyway.
I just let it fester inside.
I rather be partial to my ego.
Maybe even save a little pride.
Give and take isn't what you want.
You want a bitch.
Someone to cry to,
someone to stroke your ego
and say it's alright.
That's not my style.
It won't happen tonight.
If you're to busy when I got a plan,
I can find someone else.
You're not hard to replace.
I can pick anyone.
I don't need reputation and I can always find fun.
You were just a little entertainment
and maybe a bullet for my gun.
A contest entry
- strung out && b r o k e n more than an old cassette by PaintedParisPassion.
600 points, ended December 24, 2007, 65 entries
Gold trophy winner
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"You were just a little entertainment
and maybe a bullet for my gun."
Wow that was absolutely wonderful! =] Beautifully written, awesome write.
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intense... wow I know this is an old poem, if it wasn't amazing, i wouldn't comment but..
you deserved that gold trophy.
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great
loved the meaning and especially the "anybody with a pulse" expression
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"A friend, a companion, anyone with a pulse."
-Really shows the desperation.
"You call me all the time,
but you only want to rant or cry.
When I want to talk it's like,
"oh shit! see you later and goodbye.""
-I feel like that stanza could be a lot better. Mostly just the last line. Seems a little bit forced in my opinion.
"someone to stroke your ego
and say it's alright.
That's not my style.
It won't happen tonight"
I LOVED that part. Absolutely loved it.
And the ending made me giggle a little. Kind of like the seriousness of the poem lightened up a little to show that who ever you're writting about wasn't worth the aggravation anymore.
Wonderful Write ♥
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Okay. So, like, I'm basically speechless... Wow, I love it..
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good. I was pretty drunk when I wrote it. lol
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