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The Dark Shadow That Covered the Bastard

Those words he spoke
Those words I heard
Cut deep into my skin
Into my soul,into my heart
Hurting me with with every vengence in it

Fake a smile, fake a laugh
So I can hide the pain I feel inside

For these eyes try to hide it
But it wants to come out
It wants to kill me,  hurt me,  love me,
Help me,  hate me,  take me,
But most of all it wants to break me

As I recall the words that were spoken
I smile, a real smile
The bastard that spoke them needs to hurry!

The dark shadow is coming
Just run as far as you can
And just try to escape
And when it covers your broken soul
Remember those words that weren't repeated
For thats when you'll regret them the most

Author notes

This is a rewrite from my original poem, break me (which i deleted) but i just took some adivice from some one and made it more personal, and less of something that sounds like a cutter's write because that isnt what this write is intended to be interpreted as.. (no offense to those who cut and/or write about cutting i just didnt want this poem to be like that, its a little too personal to explain)

##2 Emo: Pain, Cutting, Suicide, etc. If you choose this option PLEASE I implore you to keep it as unique as possible. I don't want a bunch of Cliche' shit ok!
"Can You Feel Her Burnin' Through Your Veins, She Will Always Live Forever"

Revenge . What has been done to you, and what pain do you desire to inflict

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  • torieshawesum
    October 22, 2007
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    i liked the original version better... great write


  • Nam
    August 25, 2007
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    "Into my soul,into my heart
    Hurting me with with every vengence in it"

    In the lines above, the first line: there should be a space between the comma and "into". In the second line: "vengence" would be "vengeance".

    In the last line of your piece "thats" would be "that's".


  • Abstract Image
    August 4, 2007
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    i loved reading this poem it flowed and had a nice use of words...good luck
    ~Wolf~

  • frio
    July 19, 2007

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    Great

    I can really relate to your words.....wonderfully written. thank you for your comment. what really caught my attention is the first stanza