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I Will Remember You

You were the greatest gift in my life.
I've cherished all the things you said.
I know that you are not here with me.
But your dreams will live vicariously through me.

 


No one will forget the person you were.
Because the thought of you will never die.
You have always helped and encouraged me.
Thousands reminisce about your giving ways.
I've waked at night crying out for you..
Praying to God for fortification and strength.

 


You would've wanted me to be strong.
But that doesn't make your passing easier.
I just need one more chance to see you.
And I would say that I Love and miss you.
I would beg for your forgiveness;
because sometimes I disappointed you.
I am a stronger person because of you.


You were the greatest gift in my life.
I've cherished all the things you said.
I know that you are not here with me.
But your dreams will live vicariously through me.

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  • PurpleLogic
    January 7, 2008

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    AWw a wonderfull poem! you right... it comes from the heart!!!

    love your wording! well worth the medall!

  • wordman
    August 28, 2007

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    great job

    probally was`nt disappointed in you
    just maybe he did`nt really understand
    we parents just want the best for you
    sometimes we don`t know how to fulfill this need
    we have


  • Closetpoet1971
    August 3, 2007
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    true and honest emotion!

    Such a well written piece it flows almost like a conversation between two people meeting again. I could feel your emotions in each line. As well I can understand your wanting "one more day" I often find myself wishing for that.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!!
    Shannon


  • bananasfoster42
    August 2, 2007
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    this is soo beautiful! i can really relate to it, thanks for entering!


  • Kassy16
    July 27, 2007
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    om sweety

    o my sweet heart...i am sooo srry this poem is a beautiful poem


  • duana
    July 21, 2007
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    Hi Hose, if you do decide to revise this, trust your own instincts. When it comes to poetry I think it's best to trust yourself rather than outside feedback, unless it has to do with form. Only you know what you are trying to say, and only you can say exactly what is in your heart to this person. They will deeply appreciate it.


  • Phineas Red
    July 20, 2007

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    This was quite raw and honest. It's very clear that you had a strong connection with whoever this person was.

  • duana
    July 19, 2007

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    wow, Hose, you know how to express your feelings so well. This is just so beautiful.

    At first I wasn't sure if I liked the line,"your dreams will live vicariously through me."
    Often when we say someone lives vicariously through someone else it has negative conotations. I think there is a more accurate way of expressing what you want to say, but I don't know what is. It's more like you are acting in honor of their memeory. Of course I am not being critical even a bit here- I feel already guilty for saying anything at all about that line- especially if this is really about someone who means so much to you. Plus, living viraqciously can have a very private meaning that really brings out the personal relationship between the two of you- so it actually in this sense is the greatets honor! So now I love it! You are such an amazing writer! You reach a certain audience that I am serious- no one else on AQP could reach. The people here on AP who think poetry HAS to be about high faluant words, and phrasing, and technicalities- are nuts- in doing so they leave out most of the non-poetry population. I was just reading about that issue a few weeks a go- about how poetry has lost it's edge with society - you can bring it back


  • esroddo silver member
    July 19, 2007

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    Wow So Deep and touching

    You brought a tear to my eyes for I to can relate to your write. If I had one more day with that special person in my life. I would also as for forgiveness and make up for all the disappointments I made her feel. You really make me think with this outstanding write my friend. You said the words I have been wanting to say for years. But Have not had the strength or will to do. When a love one dies and you can't tell them the things that you had in your heart. Before they die it stays with you for ever. No matter how many time I say those words praying she is hearing me. Its not the same as if she was alive to tell her face to face. Thank you my friend for making me relive my hearts pain. And remember one day I will be face to face with her again and will say those word that are lingering in my heart. (LISA)

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