the is a story so old.. it is to out there
a little girl screaming in the mirror
'look what you did to me'
the blood runs down her arm
as the razor falls down to the ground
'this is all your fault'
the years pass
and the little girl looks into the mirror
to see a broken down teen
with blacked eyes
'could this be different'
the yelling starts up in her brain
she knows that there is no more hope
the gangs that rule her
tare out her heart
all she want is to be the same
so scream in to the mirror
'this is me... how do i change thee?'
he fell for her, the broken mess,
all the pieces he tried put back together
"i love her for what she is"
she looked into the mirror
'I am me; Deal With it!!'
A contest entry
- You and Me; Me and You by HerbalGoat.
300 points, ended July 29, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TAKE A LOOK IN THE MIRROR by DAMSELx.
550 points, ended November 14, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nice job with this. I like that you did not list what your are about, which is what I did not want, and that you really dug deep into who you really are.
The line that I required you to use seems a little forced, but better than others. You really need to work on your grammar and spelling. I am a stickler for this, but seeing as I did not mention to watch it, I will not hole that completely against you. -
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i cant spell
i am gald you found me good enough for the gold... and i cant spell at all my friend allie is always correcting me... cheers
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