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Nature's vent

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South, glows in glimmered starry flight

     Where gaze does shimmer sequined eyes;

Of picture painted moon's delight

      And canvas glazed in perfect lies:

Such tempered hearts of blinder sight

      Which falter feathered gift in sighs.

 

As rounder thigh in paler dress,

      With curve of Raven's wing in trace

Her whispered word is breath in bless,

      As rising vision, cast in lace;

Syllables shy harked ears to stress,

      Keener yearn, to uncommon grace.

 

To wander where her stream does flow,

      As creature calmed, in Nature's vent,

In wilder wisdoms wanton flow,

      And tow of water's winsome scent,

A soul at peace, grained pearl to grow,

      As Heaven rings belled enchantment!

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

wolfspiritguide


this inspired me by Byron seeing the beauty in a woman he had never seen before and writing his poem about her, as a response i am inspired by taking a closer look at a celestial woman, the Moon and writing a poem about her beauty as if seeing her for the first time...

prompt: http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/408-George-Gordon-Byron-She-Walks-In-Beauty

by George Gordon Byron
1788-1824, written in 1814


She Walks In Beauty


She walks in Beauty, like the night
Of cloudless climes and starry skies;
And all that's best of dark and bright
Meet in her aspect and her eyes:
Thus mellowed to that tender light
Which Heaven to gaudy day denies.

One shade the more, one ray the less,
Had half impaired the nameless grace
Which waves in every raven tress,
Or softly lightens o'er her face;
Where thoughts serenely sweet express,
How pure, how dear their dwelling-place.

And on that cheek, and o'er that brow,
So soft, so calm, yet eloquent,
The smiles that win, the tints that glow,
But tell of days in goodness spent,
A mind at peace with all below,
A heart whose love is innocent!



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  • Desire gold member
    August 7, 2007

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    Magnificent!

    Oh I Loved this one busy bee
    Congratulations on Your Trophy win~
    Wooooooooooooooo hoooooooooooooooo


    My tongue was twisted when I was writing mine
    Wonderful weaving of words

    Best wishes to You
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Celticmoon
    August 3, 2007

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    Nature's vent by wolfspiritguide


    Title - 8
    Style - 9
    Form - 9
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 9
    Originality - 8
    Reaction - 10
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 10

    Total- 93

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    August 2, 2007

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    Nature's vent by wolfspiritguide


    Title - 9
    Style - 10
    Form - 10
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 10
    Originality - 10
    Reaction - 10
    Rules - 10
    Makes sense - 10
    Enjoyable - 10

    total- 99

    (a rare high score from me, totally blown away by this poem!)


  • Frodofan silver member
    July 31, 2007
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    You're right. Sorry about that. Your score is 105

  • Frodofan silver member
    July 31, 2007

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    "creature calmed!" That's two c's

    Title - 6
    Style - 10
    Form - 10
    Spelling - 10
    Captivating - 9
    Originality - 10
    Reaction - 8
    Rules - 0
    Makes sense - 9
    Enjoyable - 8

    Response Bonus - Yes - 5
    Rhyme Scheme Bonus - Yes - 5
    Meter Bonus - No - 5

    Total: 95

    • wolfspiritguide gold member
      July 31, 2007
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      thought it meant you could have 2 c words but not any more than that in a line, it looks like that from the way it's worded. oops... sorry


  • omega13
    July 20, 2007
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    What a beautiful poem to go with such a beautiful picture such as a blood red moon

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 19, 2007

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    Ah...we have something in common...only yours is way more beautiful...I love this!!! I will send you the link to mine inspired by this poem of Byron's This is excellent!

    • wolfspiritguide gold member
      July 20, 2007
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      ah i loved yours was so beautiful, and seriously that last line is way cool how it did that...gots me thinking on why lol, but so neat...


  • Frodofan silver member
    July 19, 2007
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    Very nicely done! An impressive piece - up there with its inspiration. Thanks for entering.

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