From this night and from this hour,
Bitter sweet will turn to sour.
Let my anger bleed from me,
And lay my vengeance unto thee.
With mine eyes I seal your fate,
With flame and ash and burning hate.
I offer up my once full hollow,
Feel only pain, know only sorrow.
From this night and from this hour,
Feel my wrath and know my power.
© copyrighted property of T.J.S
Author notes
Shadedgrey- wrote this a long time ago, it wasnt intended as a poem as you can probably tell but the words just came to me and I think you can see the emotion I was feeling at that time. I'd like to hear what others think of it although I don't wish to inspire hate or the use of black magic, and for people wishing to use this I'm afraid the incantation is not enough on its own and I won't be sharing the rest.
A contest entry
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Comments
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i dont condone hexes, but this is a very well writen spell, thank you for entering.
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if i didnt want it in my contest i would have removed it my self, and honestly, i liked this one better then the one you entered in its place. i try hard to be a fair judge.
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Very witchy. I like this, I haven't got one quite like this before. Thank you, and best of luck!
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pretty cool poem, short and concise but it does not skimp on the emotion or imagery, thank you for entering and good luck
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Ooooo excellent spell! It has rhythm and rhyme and I like the whole aura of it. Excellent indeed.
Write on, poet.
Blessings,
Myth
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Wow, this has to be one of the best flowing poems i've read in a long time. You are an extremely talented writer and i can feel the hatred bleeding from this piece. Thanks so much for your entry
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I like this one. Congrats on all the trophies. It is well deserved. This one actually speaks very well. I think that a lot of us feel this way with a breakup. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this contest. Good luck.
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Wow... sounds like a creepy witchy Halloween-y chant. Great job! Rhymes and flows well, very chilling - it made me consider chanting this over my brother when he sleeps... lol. One thing though - in the most recent contest this was entered in, it's for thirteen year olds and under, and it says you're 21? Just curious.
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Lol! whoops i didn't read it properly, thought it was a "please don't enter innapropriate material as i'm under 13" message...thanks for telling me and 4 your comment!
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Wow... intense emotion, dark and strong... as for the technical things, it flows well too. An awesome poem. Thanks for entering! Shya
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so dark. i like hexes. and i would love it if they did work. its a beautiful poem. with lots real emotion in it. nice job. good luck in the contest.
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I love this poem im totally into it...thank you for joining the contest
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hahaha if only hexes really did work. I would surely love to use this one. I really love this idea and its written gorgeously.
Rose
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Awesome write!
This is a beautiful poem(even what it's about) and a great write. I like how you used the start at the end. It flowed well and came from the heart. Great write. Good luck in the contest. And O yea my favorite part is...
With mine eyes I seal your fate,
With flame and ash and burning hate.
I offer up my once full hollow,
Feel only pain, know only sorrow.
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powerfully rhymed!
and just sparking with rage!
a great revenge feelings piece!!!
It reads at a wonderfully quick pace, & I loved that you repeated the 1st like in the ending...a nice wrap up
thanks for entering!
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well i like it
-i like the 2nd stanza the most
-none of it sounds awkward
-i really like how you made it flow really well
-its the perfect lenghth
-the title's really catchy -
freakin' SIIIICKKKK
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"With mine eyes I seal your fate,
With flame and ash and burning hate."
This is the best stanze in the poem. It was a very good poem, absolutely brilliant. I admire this work. I encourage you to keep writing! Yay for encouragement and good luck. Oh and nice title.
-Swintha
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Excellent
The cadence was powerful in and of itself. Like a vacuum drawing in the mind, captured, it whirled within the bag of tricks you composed! Well Done!
DK
PS check out my entry if you like,
"Let me introduce you to Nirvana"
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Beautiful...I love the last stanza. The rhyming is beautiful and natural. Great job and good luck in the contest
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FANTASTIC!
I cant believe how many awesome entries are in this contest of mine!
I love this. I love the rhyme, the flow....
Such a good write...it comes across as a real spell...I also appreciate how you have gone out of your way to get the point across that it was not your intention to spread a vengeful hex, lol.
Interesting, well-written and a fantastic read! Thanks for your entry.
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Wow. I feel hated. :] But thats good because, that means you did your job. Thank you so much for entering.
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amazing pain. amazing poem. I love it.
especially here:
From this night and from this hour,
Bitter sweet will turn to sour.
Let my anger bleed from me,
And lay my vengeance unto thee.
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it's very shakespearian....and very dark. i wonder what the history behind this is. and for the love of everything good, please PLEASE, don't share your spells with anyone!
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Very good poem.
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Congrats on all the shinys!
A wonderfully dark piece, great read best of luck in the contest
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wrath: my deadly sin
i'm a little afraid of you now...lol no really this is powerful! it reminds me of myself a lot! i loved the flow of this it never got boring! thank you for entering our contest! i wish you the best of luck!
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Wow that's cool.
It would make a pretty cool song!
Anyway I loved the flow of this and the emotion you were obviously feeling at the time but I'm not sure what option number this would be in my contest so could you please comment this comment with the option number, thanks. -
This would make an awesome song.
Just something to think about.
ANYway, the flow is very well done and i think it's well written. I love your word choice and your rhyme scheme.
Thanks for your entry and best of luck to you
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Oooh... a little chilling, nice dark work
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Wow!
This is so beautiful.
It flows really well and rhyms well too.
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"From this night and from this hour,
Feel my wrath and know my power."
Oh man, I can totally feel the hate that just seeps out of the words. Well, thats how I saw it, and it's wonderul! I really like it Thanks for entering!
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I like this. I have bookmarked this one. I would love to use this on some of the people that I HATE at my school... and the one man that I wish would fall of the face of the earth.... Nice job. I have friends who are really into this kind of thing, and I think it's cool... I don't really practice anything, but I do know how to do a few things... ha. keep up your great work! Congrats on the honorable mention!!!
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Thanks very much for your comment but it doesn't work like that. i put it on here to convey the raw emotion that i felt when i originally wrote it not to encourage hate.
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This is really quite spellbinding, pun intended.I wish this spell would work against some of the people I hate the most.
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This is a really great write. I like it a lot.
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great write.
"I offer up my once full hollow,
Feel only pain, know only sorrow"
This line is my only critisism. This i because it gets a little wordy and repetitive of one sound.
I.e "only" "know" "only" and "sorrow" all carry an "o" sound which gets a little annoying.
But overall all a masterfull rhyme!
Much love and respect.
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Excellent write. Alot of bite in your words. I like the ryhme, words chosen with careful contemplation. Thank you for entering.
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Ouch, your words most certainly sear and sting into your victim-I would hate to be the subject of this hex! Thank you for entering my contest
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A spell... interesting...
I'm a little torn on this one. It is viciously angry, and seems to be a lashing out from a deep despair... yet I'm not entirely sure it fits the contest. Then, it sort of does. I really do like this piece. I like the spell, the wonderful rhyme (spells always have briliant rhyme don't they?), and the seething anger. In a way, it could be considered a last word - the last thing you say before you metamorphasize into something totally different.
Beautiful. I'm still torn... lol
Thanks for the entry!!!
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Love this. Is it a sonet? Very good feeling. Thank you for entering and good luck
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Thanks! i didnt write it that way intentionally but it might be a sonnet without me realising lol i just write what comes out.
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Well now...
I have issues typically with rhyming poems, I usually can not bare to read them for fear of lashing out at them in frustration about their inability to produce a decent poem. However, my stigma has had no effect on your poem. I enjoyed your poem so much so most likely because of the relationship it has with my own life. At one point in my life I became bitter and angry at everyone and I decided that if no one was going to treat me the way i treated them, with the respect that a decent human being deserves, then I shall cast the wrath of god himself upon them....Long story short I hurt a lot of people and ruined many of their futures. However much damage was caused and the lessons that were learned, it was not worth the sacrifices that it took to get there. However, this write made me go back to that place in time and recall the mean and hateful things I accomplished and realize that I am a much better and different person now.
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i think things like this do not need to be posted i think things like this break the laws that are given forth called the three fold and you will gain very much the karma you placed out 3 fold for every person who reads this now a wise move if you value life
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I feel your need for revenge. Your over powering emotion and desperation here. A great piece!
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WOW
You are truly gifted. This is remarkable. When the reader can 'feel' each word, the emotions are alive and it stirs the soul (as it did)even makes us sit for a moment after reading and just go..wow, then dude that makes for an excellent writer, which you most certainly are. And one can easily see you have a passion for writing, it is felt in your strong words. This is indeed a powerful poem, I absolutely love it. If only I could write so flawless. Excellent.
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loved it...loved the whole darkness theme...i see u either experiance lots n have this all build up...well thats the only way i see it...i do the same sometime...its way better just getting it out in poetry...once again loved it
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Wow.... I love everything in your poem,,,,,its great
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