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I-l-o-v-e-y-o-u

I-s there any
l-ove that
o-thers can give
v-ery few hearts but
e-nough for the moment that
y-our soul breaks
o-pen with love and is left
u-ntied

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  • Dienush
    August 22, 2007

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    I really like this. It is sweet and true in a delicate way. The dashes (-) are sort of distracting though. I would suggest leaving them out and perhaps adding a blank line between each vertical word. It would look like this:

    i

    l
    o
    v
    e

    y
    u
    o

    You can mention that it is an acrostic (has a word spelled vertically) in the author notes.
    As for the message and the words, as I said, it's really cute.

    ~Diana


  • poorme
    July 20, 2007
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