How can you say you love me
While you're making me feel this way
You talk to me like I'm worthless
It only gets worse every day
Love isn't about control
Or making someone cry
It doesn't bring you sadness
And need to tell you lies
There's no pain brought upon your soul
Nor shattering of your heart
You only want to be held close
And never be broken apart
I don't know what happened
For you to be this way
But someday love just won't be enough
To make me want to stay
Author notes
I wrote this for the man I love. I wanted to tell him that his words and actions toward me break my heart every day. And I'm afraid that the day is coming that love just won't be enough!
A contest entry
- Best Of Broken Hearts (or revenge) by emLeejo.
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Comments
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okay, I love the title. Love the rhyme scheme. Love the emotion. The passion. The ending. It was over all way great. Seriously.
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We can only take so much...has he read your words? They are beautiful..so full of pain. Thank you for enetering
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An enjoyable piece...
An enjoyable piece; unfortunately, I'm well acquainted with heartbreak and its associated misery, and can relate to this poem; love does conquer pain, provided our actions are supported by God's love and principles; nicely done. --Joe
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I hate it when it does not seem to work out! I hate it when it gets to this point! Too much growing pain and sadness! This was a hard read for me right now! Other things are making me sad. I hope the best for you, try to talk it out if you can! I understand a little when you allow one thing to be the center of a little strength and that center seems to be failing!
Take care!
K
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Thanks, Kyle! Sorry to hear that things are making you sad right now!!!! If you need to talk or just vent, I'm here!!!!
~DAWN~
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fuckin amazing write. it flows, has some rhythm, and its really meaningful. it really seems like you took exactly what you were feeling, and were able to put it perfectly into words. gorgeous piece. keep it up
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Muffin Girl
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Thanks!!!!
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you just have to love them more that's all. Love conquers all my appraisal. I love your expressive stand on a dificult spot to be. Love is control when u dont communicate. People express themselves in a different way. If u say things that is in your mind and let it go, this is not manipulative. It's speaking sincerey. Your poem offers a olot of focus in taking advice in a mature way. Hearing a lot of honesty from it. Love is an entity in itself. It recovers itself every few minutes like a auto-recovery on the comp. I gueess is jsut an effort in peoles thinking and shifts. Super inspiring!
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Thank you for reading and commenting!!!!
~DAWN~
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Beautiful!
Although sad, I think this was a beautiful poem.
Love is very painful sometimes because of the
very things you speak about in your poem.
Sometimes we fall for people that don't appreciate
our love. They maybe immature or just not ready
for it. Anyway, I love this piece because it
speaks from the heart. Lovely!
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Thank you!!!!
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I love this! It's describing a situation a friend of mine is going through. Well especially the last two lines, which I hope will happen. She's in love with her husband yet is scared of him but thinks he'd take her kids from her, and...yeah. But anyways so many people go through things like this and it's good for them to know that they aren't alone or crazy. You give them that, if I had read this about a year ago you would've given ME that.
Good write!
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Thank you for commenting!!!! I'm glad that I could somehow help!!!! And actually since reading this (I wrote it about 2 weeks ago) he's been ALOT different. For the better!!!!
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I can relate to this poem very well. I tried to tell my ex how he was hurting me, how 75% of the time when he left i would start crying. i hope that things turn out for the best for you! btw...Your poem is very well written!!!
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Thank you!!!!
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that was amazing.... very good, like this is exactly the same way with me and my ex i mean well pretty much the same. but it sucks, and im sorry that you have to deal with it. but good write
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Thank you for commenting!!!! I'm so sorry that you are going through a similar situation!!!!
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Thank you for reading and commenting!!!! I'm sorry that you are going through a similar situation!!!!
~DAWN~
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