The mirror reflects the image of a woman looking for herself
She closes her eyes
Slowly allowing them to open she is unable to realize what she sees
So she closes her eyes taking another breath and telling herself lets try this again
Slowly she allows them to open once more
Still confused with the image before her she closes her eyes and fades away
This time she lets the images fill her mind
Consumed in her thoughts with her eyes still closed
She sees a little girl pensively peering through a window
Suddenly it all disappears only to quickly return
Wondering what this little girl represents she lets her thoughts continue to flow
The little girl then gets up from were she was sitting
Turning to her with an uncomfortable look she says
"Who are you,why are you here"
As the mirror shows the reflection of her face twist into and uncomfortable position
Her thoughts then fill with the questions "who am I and why am I here"
Then the image disappears
Like before it quickly returns
This time the girl is older
She walks into her daddy's room she calls his name but he does not move
The next thing that comes to her mind are the sounds of the sirens as they fill the air
Her daddy has gone to a higher place and the girl now searches for the piece of her that has been taken away
Then once more the image disappears
But quickly returns
The girl is older than the last time she was seen
She walks around the room
She seems to be more absorbed in herself as she turns to realize she's not alone
There are few harsh words spoken then the argument begins only to end as it always has
And they slowly disappear as their screams echo into the silence
Scared of all she's seen in such short time and afraid the images will return with things she doesn't wish to see
She quickly opens her eyes and sees herself in the mirror
This time she realizes what she sees
A much older and wiser version of herself
She sees how far she's come in life
And realizes she's happier than she was when she closed her eyes
Author notes
mirror mirror
hmmmm....what do you think sometimes you have to look into the past to live in your future
Pensive-expressing thoughtfulness with sadness
A contest entry
- Mirror Mirror by Ignis Corpus.
500 points, ended August 1, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS AND THE BLESSED DARK ANGEL by Devilish Temptation.
600 points, ended March 19, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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OMG very truthfully said well done this is a marvelous piece of writing, and a talented piece at that
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compelling
I could care less about "run on sentences" most of my poetry is the same way (I guess that is what happens when you write from the heart!) I am truly moved by this poem and can personally relate. you are now one of my favorites. Thank you for your haunting work...
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wow, this poem is very deep. i could not stop reading it. I just thought to click on a random name and comment, glad i did. great
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i like this...pretty...and how it switched...
great write
especially this line
She quickly opens her eyes and sees herself in the mirror
This time she realizes what she sees
A much older and wiser version of herself
She sees how far she's come in life
And realizes she's happier than she was when she closed her eyes -
OOOOOOOOOOh, you GOT it. How powerful a read this was for me, as I'm going through this right now. Can I print this up and save it?
I love the pain, and the tragedy. I love that she has confront herself, and finally accepts her image as herself. I love the way you ended it, that all that she feared in facing herself wasn't so bad after all. Very powerful read. Good work!!
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A very good write. I like how you have turned this from being negative to positive. Great write x
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The entire thing is one, huge, run on sentence without punctuation. Even though the thought behind it is truly beautiful, it's hard to read when all the words are jumbled together without the convenience of commas, and periods, and semi-colons, and the like.
>>searches for the piece of her that has been taken away
this is beautiful, however.
Thanks for sharing.
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your the only one that thinks that so i am sorry you feel that way...
the shark
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What A Revelation..........................
for the girl in this poem!!! Alot of people never reach that point in their lives, always looking back, never completely letting go of the past. It is ok to revisit as you have in this piece and make sense of how you have become who you are be it good or bad. But some revisit and dwell and go into deep depressions. Good for you as you were able to revisit your past a little at a time and grow in maturity from those visits. This was an impressive poem both in writing and in impact on your readers!!!Thanks for sharing this with me today!!!~~Toni~~
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Interesting look into the mirror. To look into a mirror and see onesself for who we truly are is a difficult task at best. Sometimes, we do not like what we see. Though the overwhelming feeling is sadness. In the end, it shows hope in that she is happier than before she closed her eyes. Realizing that she needed to put all the pieces of her life in place. (Well that's what I think
) Well done. I truly enjoyed reading this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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When we see our reflection in the mirror we sometimes do not really see ourselves that way, but instead as we once were. Inside we are all those people, and as we age outsidde, remain the same inside. An interesting way to look at this - easy to read and understand, good flow and universal I think.
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AMAZING....words can't decribe what I felt reading this
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AMAZINGNESS!
wow, it's amazing how one person, one small, little, 17 year old person can relate to his poem... (It isn't my dad, it's my grandpa that is gone, but he's in a better place, no need to mourn over it.) I love the way you wrote this! it's absolutely amazing! if I could, I would applaud you a hundred times! great write! keep it up!
Crimson
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EXCELLENT JOB!
What a touching compelling work of poetry. I enjoyed reading the thoughts coming from your pen. Sad but I can understand where you are coming from. Thanks for sharing this!
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WOW
this was a good poem, well written, and configured and put together, well done. like it. sorry man i have one appllaude to give but will give y ou more tomorrow.
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Great job.
I was that little girl years ago, may God bless and keep you.
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This was so good! Very interesting concept, very original. I like the way it documented a life, and then at the end you found out it was her life. It kept you guessing, and wondering, which made it more engaging. The last few lines were excellent, they really ended the poem well. This was very nice to read, thanks for sharing. KP
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Great
Wow! That is a really good poem. Hi my name is Kayla. What kind of poetry are you into? -
Consumed in her thoughts with her eyes still closed
She sees a little girl pensively peering through a window
well yes the past keeps hunting us lovely write with a story told withing really nie I wrote a poem too about mirrior reflection of one's self,well done -
Wow
This is an amazing write!! It is very beautifully written
"She sees how far she's come in life
And realizes she's happier than she was when she closed her eyes" -
Awestruck
Sharky,
The duality in the title and the vague specificity in the content make this a stunning write. Stunning because you are so young and yet realize that a life is constructed day by day. What transpires today will shape us into our future being.
I was pleased that she was happy with herself in her future and able to reflect upon the past without lingering or longing. May you do so as well. RED
ILYMBG
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A WONDERFUL POEM
written beautifully with inflection each time she closes her eye another memory from her past appears sometimes we all need to take another look at ourselves to see how far we have come thank you for s haring this peom and good luck -
such heart felt emotion
loved this too nice ending finaly her eyes are open and the past can stay where it is alowing her to move on very moving piece this was i loved, the sentances are a bit to long for me but i loved the emotion in this piece, and the repition of the eyes closed and eyes open thing was nice writing
good luck in this contest poet, this was a pleasure to read, thanks for posting it
john
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wow
wow that is amazing so powerful you definatley got your point across good job
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Masterpiece...
This truly shows your soul when you look in the mirror
Our future brings us to the past and that's how we learn to stand at last...
Brilliant piece of art!
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Very thoughtful line ...
"The mirror reflects the image of a woman looking for herself"
We spend a lot of time trying to find our true selves. Looking into the past is painful for many, but to move into the future, we must come to grips with our past. That clears the way for all the possibilities the future can bring. With age comes wisdom and appreciation of all that we are. Best of luck in the contest!
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So well spoken here
I think everyone has to see the past to really know the person from whence stands before them for we are our worst critiques and we are also the one who brought it on ourself
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Well crafted
I love the idea behind the poem and the vagary in the first line of looking for herself rather than at herself. From there we get to hitch a ride through a life that could be anyones.
True it is that if we can see the important moments along with the everyday trials in the past we see the present more clearly and where our future may lead.
Great presentation. Brava. camen
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She sees a little girl pensively peering through a window
Suddenly it all disappears only to quickly return
Wondering what this little girl represents she lets her thoughts continue to flow
The little girl then gets up from were she was sitting
Turning to her with an uncomfortable look she says
"Who are you,why are you here"
are my favorite lines, i loved the poem i can realte to this, good job on this piece and i wish you the best of luck in this contes -
Well you definitely didn't leave any questions with this one. Good job
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thanks so much for the comment
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