Oh yesterday when you called
I was set to tell you all
that I could no longer bear to be alone
We must have had a bad connection
Did I hear your voice inflection
telling me you knew exactly what went wrong
You told me you understood
and you’d drop by if you could
to give me what I’ve been missing for so long
I returned to doing chores
waiting like I had before
patiently for her to show up on my step
An hour passed and then one more
she didn’t knock on my front door
draining me of all the hope that I had left
I went to bed and closed my eyes
not believing she would lie
and hoping my dreams hadn’t met an early death
On her way to some place else
she decided by herself
that she would turn around and stop on by
Well I could hardly turn her down
My feet had barely touched the ground
when the teardrops began falling by my side
I gently reached to hold her
that’s when I sweetly told her
there’s no longer any need for you to cry
no longer any need to say goodbye
no need to say goodbye ……
Please tell me what you think
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I don't like goodbyes. Farewells work best for me. This is melancholy but lyrical, and even sheds light at the end. I agree; "No need to say goodbye". I so wish I could rhyme with this much ease and finesse.
Always ♥
Renee
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lyrical warmth ...
I feel that you've shared some sweet thoughts with these lyrics and also thought that your rhyming pattern was interestingly different and yet it works well. I'd love to hear the music that could be written to go along with your words. joy
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wow leo, this is so sad and heartfelt. i understand this feeling quite well but i love the way you turned it around in the end. you're a hell of a guy leo, a hell of a guy
be well and be blessed
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Heart touching write my friend.
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I love how you have turned pain into hope at the end. A really good piece, Leo. Hugs, Patricia
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This is incredibly deep and sweet. last lines moved me, Not many poems on here can do that. outstanding work
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smiling...very lovely moving piece here Leo. Idare say that I did enjoy it very much. You have quite a way with words. excellent work here.
love
J
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what a sad story with a nice ending of hope. there was great flow to this poem and I agree with the others, this definately read like song material.
great write!!!
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How sweet is this Leo? What a lovely ending to the beginning of a sad story. Did you mean for this to sound like a song? It really does, especially the ending. Well done again my friend.
~Lyrical
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Brilliant I loved this! A lovely way of rhyming! A very true subject as well, You show the emotion very well! Well done!!
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WOW! What a read this is! How many can relate to this one! I am sure. But sometimes that last goodbye really is for the best, for those involved. As it was in my case. Great job on this one.
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Well my friend, it seems like you've got yourself some lyrics here. This makes for one of those good ole fashioned country songs.....you know, the kind that says tain't no sense in wasting one tear, put it down in a song and make a **** of a lot of money to help ease the pain!!
~Michelle~
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