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Delirium

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Silver bruises
Invisible outlines

& I'm melting into the wallpaper


slithering down the drainpipe
raining on the window

Evaporating


Into a cloud of gas
That isn't even worthy enough
To be water vapour.

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For LucyLightening's contest,
Option 6.
Death.

Hope youre okay, we havent spoken in aggges!!

Sophie-Kathryn
Formally known as Flutterby--x

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  • LucyLightning
    April 6

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    As per usuaaaal, fantastic!
    I remember always loving your poetry ever so much.

    I really enjoyed the wording & the images,
    beaaautiful.


  • quietmonster
    August 5, 2007

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    Your poems never cease to amaze in me in the richness of their language and ambition of their subjects.

    "Into a cloud of gas
    That isn't even worthy enough
    To be water vapour"

    So sad, but so powerful.


  • Exodus gold member
    July 29, 2007

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    How did I miss this one? It's brilliant babe, just like you. Hell if I started quoting the parts I liked I'd have the whole damn thing in here. So lets just say I loved it


  • Atrophya
    July 25, 2007

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    wow, lovely way of putting it. you're creative, beautiful and expressive in a way most fail to achieve. i love you baby. <3


  • petrichor
    July 21, 2007

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    'Silver bruises
    Invisible outlines

    & I'm melting into the wallpaper'
    that was gorgeous imagery. I liked the format of this, almost spread out like the spirit leaving the body. It's lovely.

    <33


  • CarCrashHumor
    July 20, 2007

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    yayyyyy, THANK YOU for entering.

    giving me something original that my eyes and mind can devour with pleasure.

    love this.
    just a spelling mistake on the word invisible.
    ♥


  • They Say Shannon
    July 19, 2007
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    "& I'm melting into the wallpaper


    slithering down the drainpipe
    raining on the window

    Evaporating"

    Ooh, those lines were magnicificent.
    I love the topic you chose and the way you chose to interpret/write about it.

    Good luck in the contest, bby. I hope you win. :] <3

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