I'm sorry I can't be there with you
Sorry for all the pain that I caused you
I'm nothing but a lost cause
You'll never get what you need
Not with me around
So when I leave
Please, don't grieve
Send me a smile
So I can smile back
Author notes
Eminem- When I'm gone
A contest entry
- Music and Leadership by Star-of-David.
700 points, ended July 31, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow.....short and sweet. And quite powerful at that too. You've got it spot on with this poem, I can feel the song has a huge influence here; it's written so much like Eminem raps....If you look at it closely enough, you can put the rhythm of 'When I'm Gone' to this poem, as if this were an extra verse added in.
I like this a lot, its short but so much power curled up inside. Well Done.
Good Luck in the contest.
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you made me try to rap this to his beat! that was interesting!
thanks for the comment!
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