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Her Waterfall


Sexy & Romantic glitter graphics from S e x i l u v . c o m


Waterfalls of beauty,
that of thick beautiful hair.
Flowing endlessly it seems,
over that of a sparkling body.
The delicate skin before me,
enticing my senses, awakening
those feelings buried long ago.
Speechless as my thoughts trail,
seeking their own destinations.
Traveling slowly, from waterfall
to the river’s bed, rushing fast.
Palms become sweaty, as they too
want to join my thoughts, in their
own search of treasures.
Such a powerful glow, existing
in the eyes of this precious creature.
My breathing increases, as they realize,
I must have them, to feel the power of,
their own personal waterfall.

Author notes

LMAO ok people this is for contest purpose....taking on a different perspective here hope it works.

The poem itself is 20 lines added pic.

A contest entry

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  • log-home-guy-Nic
    April 24

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    like this one

    I can see how much you have changed from this to now. nice take on the pic. did you realize that the words have the outline of a womans head and sholders. I love you


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      April 24
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      yes i have done many outlined pieces ...its called concrete poetry.
      i also have one that is a candle burning -flickering..

      I love you


  • forgotten dream
    July 21, 2007
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    a very sensual piece. great descriptions throughout, and good word choices. it opens strong, and doesn't disappoint. i like the imagery and symbolism of the waterfall and how you use it throughout the piece - beginning, middle, end. a strong write. keept it up. thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest <3


  • Three Doves
    July 18, 2007

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    It worked for me. Go deeper than any man has gone before. A very enticing piece as well as the pic.
    Well done. Good luck in the contest. Many blessings to you.

  • Rossetti
    July 18, 2007
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    Wonderful. The imagery is wonderfully watery. lol. I love the poem. Chris.

  • cherchezlafemme
    July 18, 2007

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    Your poem is a true treasure in indulgence Very colorful and suave. A nice melody attached to it. Very gratifying it removes the isolated part of you, the unsure feelings. Like waterfalls are very powerful in nature and they draw adoration and fascination. These lines -
    Traveling slowly, from waterfall
    to the river’s bed, rushing fast.
    So exquisite and refined! In affirmation of love at its own pace.. The pic is exceptional. I have auburn hair the same length


  • HeavenScent4U
    July 18, 2007

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    wow hun, this is exquisite and so tantalizing takes me on a journey, a very pleasant one at that. very vivid and enticing. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    July 18, 2007

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    I really love red hair. I dyewd mine red because I like being a red head. I wish I had red haior naturally.

  • PLaing2007
    July 18, 2007
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    Very nice work here. I will have sweet dreams tonight tonight

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