blue, red, velvet
yellow and green
flow down a
misty morning's
sky, I look upon it...
what is a rainbow?
if not God's painting
in the sky so
far superior to
my wildest dreams.
A contest entry
- 20 lines or less by forgotten dream.
425 points, ended July 21, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Enchanting imagry here,
Thank you for happening upon my poem as yours to me has the elements of inspiration! keep up the good writing! This reminds me of the transendential writing of the late 1800's, elements of Emerson, Thoreau and whitman. Very nice
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rainbows are truly nature's masterpieces. they completely enchant me. i think my favorite part/description is 'flow down a misty morning's sky'. really just a beautiful image. my only suggestion would be to not shart of with a list of colors, but find a more descriptive way of wording them. i think this piece needs a strong beginning, because it definetly ends strongly. overall a nice piece. thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest <3
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It absodamlutely is Gods painting and what a masterpiece he does..Here in Arizona we have the most magnificent skies...I took a picture its on one of my poems,,about the heat here....lovely vivid imagery seen in this poem...Great job...
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