Discard my feelings
They dont matter anymore
I've seen them recently
Smashed upon the floor.
You took what I had
And you threw it away
And now my life is damaged
Full of disarray.
And where I'd be sad and hurt
I'm just a soul full of rage
All I smell is the burning
Of the flowers and sage.
You broke your vow
You deceived me and lied
But Im sick of the hurt
And the tears that I've cried.
Im so full of madness
I can hardly keep sane
I can see you with her
It's etched in my brain.
I just want to take your heart and brake it
Like you did mine
Complete my revenge
Make me feel devine.
I didnt used to be like this
I didnt used to be this way
But you've formed me to a mold
You formed me like your clay.
You know what you've done
You can finally see
You are what makes me mad
You are the rage in me.
Author notes
Kinda true...but i entered cuz of cori :] happy?
A contest entry
- 3 Part Contest: Part 1- Rage [[BIG POINTS]] by GiftedPsychosis.
1500 points, ended August 7, 2007, 26 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the gold. Good poem, good job.
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I'm back and judging. Are you happy now?
I think that this is a wonderful poem. I love the rhyming!
Great job and good luck in the contest!
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brilliant!
i loved this, i was taken word by word through this whole poem with only one glitch, noticed a spelling mistake, break rather then brake (heart bit). other then that, yes, visually its a light spacious write with brooding bubbling hate/anger just beneath the surface.
do not let others have the power to change your life into one of rage and hate, its in your own hands.
i am no expert in poetry, i write and comment from the heart, i also do not suggest i am right in my interpretation, it is just the way i see it.
kudos on your poem.
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AWESOME!!! go meg!!! nice poem good luck!!
happy!
evilsss
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OMG! I love it.....It is awesome!
I know I haven't been on in a while...but I'm back!
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YAY great job! I LOVE IT!!
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Spaz this iz zuper! lolz, great job spaz miss ya.
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Oh, I'm not supposed to comment on the entries till the end!
But I HAVE to!
I LOVE it!!
It's very good!
And, by the way, yes, I am happy.
Thank you for entering this one.
But know that if you win a trophy you have to enter the next!!
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Awwwuh!!Thank you!!And yes I am aware of the consequences
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There is no kind of rage quite like that of being cheated on. The sting of anger is excrutiating.
Nice write.
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