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How Could I be This way?

D.E.P.R.E.S.S.E.D

 

Different disguises hide my face

Empty feelings cover my grace.

Pressure building ever so high

Restless motivation about to die.

Emotion soaks through and spirals down

Secrets and pain emerge from my frown.

Screams and cries leak like blood

Eating what's left of the shameless flood.

Dead in silence, my body feels like mud.

 

How could I be this way

When I pray to God above?

I must love what I destroy

and destroy what I love.

 

A.F.R.A.I.D

 

After math is hard to add

Fearful, careless, disgusted and mad.

Revenge is a dish rather served cold

appetite for pain starts to unfold.

Irritation strikes the nerves

Death is what thee deserves.

 

How could I be this way

when I pray to God above?

I must love what I destroy

and destroy what I love.

 

A.L.O.N.E

 

Alternatives flow to my needy mind

Lust and love fades behind.

Only you can stop this contagious disease

Nauseating cries echo in displease.

Each breath  I take, feels like stings from bees.

 

How could I be this way

when I pray to God above.

I must love what I destroy

and destroy what I love.

 

P.R.A.Y

 

Please set my mind at serenity

Release my full identity.

Answer my why's and wipe my eyes

Young lord, oh God, stop my goodbyes.

 

How could I be this way

when I pray to [Y.O.U] above?

I must love what I destroy

and destroy what I love.

 

G.O.D

 

Give me strength dear God

Open your arms to me.

Destroy my pain and fulfill my dream.

 

How could I be this way

When I pray to [Y.O.U] above?

I must love what I destroy

and destroy what I love.

 

Author notes

Contest Option: Quote #2

This is just a poem! No i am not going back to the way i was. . .i am perfectly fine. . .i just needed to write something && this is what came out and i must say. . . it's one of my favorites.

*btw--> If you look down on the left side, it spells out the word above in capital letters

((i edited my poem. Thanks for fixin my mistakes i'm not the best speller and that's all thanks to my speach problems. . . yippy! [NOT]

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  • Beating gold member
    September 12, 2007
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    this piece is very good. The way you took the words and used their letters (don't remember what the form is called) was very good. It didn't feel forced at all. I've felt a lot of the things that you described, and their was a strong feeling of sadness and frustration in this. Great job!


  • BarbedWireButterfly
    July 23, 2007
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    >.< i see god. i didn't want to see god. oh well. i won't dq you for it. the form and style are quiet interesting. the expression and language is good. thank you for entering and good luck


    • Walking In pAiN
      August 3, 2007
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      would it be better if i removed the "god" part for this contest cuz i would it you'd like.


  • Felix BlackHeart
    July 17, 2007

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    I love this poem. if you read it right, and had the right music in the backround it could even be a song. seriously. I love how you spelled things out on the side, thats what caught my attention at first. loved it all. especially the first line on A.F.R.A.I.D. It was very clever to say, "the after math was hard to add." and repeating the paraghraph was very good, thats what made me think of a song. you are a really good poet. thanx for writing and sharing your skills with others to read.
    Felix BlackHeart


  • Loveispeace
    July 17, 2007
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    wow!

    your a really freat writer!


  • slayenemy909
    July 17, 2007

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    well done

    "Each breath I take slows my heart rate." this line seemed to interrupt the flow slightly for me
    "Destroy my pain and for fill my dream" I think you meant to say Fulfill ...but ANYWAYS on to the meat of it all. I love the rhyme scheme and the flow that most of this had, it just rolled right along. The acronyms added a nice creative touch that you handled really well. Also, I think the repitition of "How could I be this way,When I pray to God above? I must love what I destroy, and destroy what I love." added cohesiveness and was used to great effect. The last part imparticular "I must love what I destroy, and destroy what I love" reminded me of some writes I have done, so it was easy for me to connect with. Overall I thought this was wonderful and I am glad I found it. thanks for the great read.


  • katscradle
    July 17, 2007
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    A POWERFUL PIECE

    two edits are needed and the afraid stanza thy should be thee and ubder the God stanza its fulfill not for fill
    other than those two changes this is a very good poem i love the anagrams you used as stanzas


  • PrincessOfLostHope
    July 17, 2007
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    Great. I really like this. I think its kool how you did the words. Great write!


  • GlowstickOfLove
    July 17, 2007
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    This is so coollies :]


    ♥--T.R;

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