Darkness engulfs the room like a rivers mist
We sit close yet apart in heart
Our passion lays exhausted on the wrinkled linen, moist and frayed beneath us
Tears are revisited under different rationale
As our memories are contested by lust and acquaintance
We think,
Recall
The sorrow and hurt that opened the door to a need
Escorted in with tears of betrayal
From another
Comfort is the prerequisite
Not desire, not passion
From a friend
But yet, it arrived
From your lips that found my neck as I embraced the naked back
Of wasted love, wasted concern
For another
My own desire played havoc at each glimpse of your voluptuous frame
Perspiration flowed down you spine as I traced it with my free hand
You shuddered
When the invasion occurred
Was it caution or anticipation?
Your hands fondled my dreads as our lips hungrily coupled
The heat rose within me like Mediterranean hot springs
Biting her lip she moaned in-between sobs of betrayal
I could almost feel through her as I pressed closer and closer
Her hands changed venue as it reached below to caress that which had need
That need within her, that need for her
Almost violently we savagely ripped the sheer garment that covered her
Hiding what could not be hidden
She placed my lips between her as I
Breathed in her passion
Breathed in her request as tears changed to crazed furor from her piercing brown eyes
Casual acquaintance changed to obsessive desire
Within minutes
Within minds,
That was past
As the passion dripped from her I ravaged her body over and over
With my hands, my lips and here and now
My Lustful soul
Lovemaking was not the desire
Hurtful desire
Vengeful passion
Twisted emotions took control as we scared our bodies and minds
Inhibition left at the door
Reservations left with memories
Entering at every desirable point she welcomed the hurtful pleasure
Until we lay exhausted from the ordeal
We sit hear regretting the lost
Regretting the trust and
Regretting the relationship we had will
Never
Ever
Be the same
In a list
A contest entry
- Bare, Bold, Brazen Contest of Erotic Poetry by ennovy.
475 points, ended July 22, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I must say that this is a whole lot of reading, my new found friend.
But believe me when I say it was well worth my time.
I don't know how one can have a favorite part in such an incredible piece of poetry. The whole poem was simply remarkable.
And I give you freely and gladly my last applause of the day.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Time and Again
Beyond the recesses of my creativity, I am blown away by your talented molding of life, passions, desires, and truths...they behold the soul, strong and deeply flowing.
So true are your words, I commend you for writing the realities. I could feel heat in the transitions, sensing the soul deepening with pain, yet the body was tingly in the sensualities. ...still pondering all the levels of this great write
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I LOVED the following lines
We sit close yet apart in heart
Our passion lays exhausted on the wrinkled linen, moist and frayed beneath us
Tears are revisited under different rationale (really beautiful, original)
The sorrow and hurt that opened the door to a need
Escorted in with tears of betrayal
Comfort is the prerequisite
Not desire, not passion
as I embraced the naked back
Of wasted love, wasted concern
For another (fantastic wording)
You shuddered
When the invasion occurred
Was it caution or anticipation? (i like this question)Your hands fondled my dreads as our lips hungrily coupled
The heat rose within me like Mediterranean hot springs (whoa baby!)
Biting her lip
Her hands changed venue
violently we savagely ripped
Hiding what could not be hidden
Casual acquaintance changed to obsessive desire
Within minutes
Within minds,
That was past
As the passion dripped from her I ravaged her body..
With ...
My Lustful soul
Hurtful desire
Vengeful passion
Twisted emotions took control as we scared our bodies and minds
Inhibition left at the door
Reservations left with memories
We sit hear regretting the lost
Regretting the trust and
Regretting the relationship we had will
Never
Ever
Be the same
Tears are revisited under different rationale
i really love d the final line how it tied it all back together with the opening stanza
simply beautiful,
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- thank you so much. You know some times I forget some of the things I have written in the past. I was told let go of your darlings so that you will never regret the new. I try. But thank you for your great insite and comments. ~ Mykeeee
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I really enjoy how it seems to build and build and then the quiet, thoughtful time afterward. Captured the essence of the moment quite well. I like how it shows the duality, the risk of changing a relationship and just letting go to fulfill personal needs.
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Another big smile!!!
Thank you so much. U always bring the creative juices out of me. Also I think you deserve my best when ever I enter any of your contest. -
Excellent
You have done an awesome job on this poem, the love scene is hot but the poem is also sad, two friends find comfort in each others arms, only to have regrets that their realationship has changed and will never be the same. Excellent write, good luck in contest, this poem deserves a trophy, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Thank you - great observer you are
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Uh Huh!
Nicely done you have met each of the three B's...the bare, bold and brazen...Thank you for entering my contest.............novy
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You are more than welcome - you come up with great ideas
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This left me tingling, WOW!
Hugs onesugar
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I'll keep it up
Thank U - it took me to a different place. I love to change perspective
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i like this it is such a great detailed write. keep sharing that talent with us
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Thank you - I love the visual writing. If you can't see it it doesn't relate very well.
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