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Golden Shadows

 

as chaos swirls

in spark of life

rained in showers,

shuddered shadows

 

i calm my curl

in grassy whorl,

gasped greener breath

of sweet grass, glimmered

 

where eye does speak

of straighter paths,

laid low in dust

and stone, of ancients

 

memories condense

in circles twirl; lightening hurls

stored release

of brighter future framed

 

in antediluvian peace

 

 

 

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  • Tangled Angle
    July 17, 2007

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    This was really good, the best one so far out of the 4 that I've read.

    originality: 10
    creativity: 10
    use of devices: 10
    title: 8
    development: 9
    rhyme/line- breaks: 9
    length: 10
    flow: 9
    Impact: 9
    Enjoyment: 8

    Total: 92