Hair blew into my mouth.
I ran my fingers along strands.
Purring laughter stole my breath.
Conforming shapes
flowed to grasses. Light
revealed the path of the wind.
My fingers traced
a hush, then a sigh
our hearts to follow,
flow
pool.
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie Brunch 10/20/40 by poet2angels.
475 points, ended July 17, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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LOvely, Tom...Sorry, my comments are so short...by the time I get here, it's all been said..I do love what I've been reading though,
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Ah, but not been said by you. I love the way your layer your insights, pile on your visions and how the juxstaposition of your insights creates more.
Or maybe it is, just, that i am greedy.
Love, Tom B.
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hmmm strange. i feel as if i have raed this
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Are you visiting the future in your dreams again.
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lol must be. so i hadnt read it? hmmm.. then i guess i will just say pretty and that will be that.
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I dont even care what the prompt was for this quikiie, it again has left me standing on the edge of a dune, watching the ocean tide with the gentle breeze blowing thru hair, and a gentleman sensually and gently caressing cheeks and wisping hair blowing by him...well done...
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Thanks for sharing you joy in this one. I envisioned standing behind my love, her hair in my face. You see it perfectly. Placing me at the ocean is never a mistake. Love, Tom B.
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lovely ending
a delicate web you've woven in this piece... captivating imagery in this gently worded piece... lovely...
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It is a moment. When we live in it, infinite in possiblity. When we live in our discussion of it, another discussion of the rating system we have in our mind. We lose the value of our life by not living 100% availble for the moment we are experiencing our experience.
Love, Tom B.
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Purrrfect.
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It is always available if you listen without the conversation of your mind.
Love Tom B.
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sigh~
I love love love this....I cannot help but recognize the words and their source...ty for making me smile...great poem for the prompt...
Lynda
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I can not disguise myself. Oh well, hope you love the touch.
Love, Tom B.
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beautiful.
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Thanks. Appreciate the vote of confidence.
~ Tom
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your prompt is:
"A Moment To Breathe"
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